Snake's Tooth And Hawk's Nail

Two of the nature's most notorious rivals of all time that have been at war against each other for countless centuries where no one ever knew how it all started, so here's my story what I'd think.

 

Somewhere In The Land Of The Dune

Already Skipped The Devil His Due

 

In The Searches For The Victims To Take

Slithering Around The Deadly Rattlesnake

 

Until Out Of Nowhere Came Along The Hawk

Same Deed As The Snake's, It's On The Stalk

 

Eyes Of The Serpent Have Gained The Sights

When The Hawk Has Covered The Skylight

 

Sound Of The Church's Broken Bell Has Tolled

Hissing Into The Position Of All Hell Bent Coiled

 

Flight Of The Hawk Had Quickly Descended

Only For The Snake's Death To Be Condemned

 

Rattling With The Only One Long Sharp Tooth

While Dripping Venom In The Way Of Smooth

 

Right Underneath The Ravenous Hawk's Long Tail

The Claws Are Opened With Only One Black Nail

 

Both Of The Worlds Have Ultimately Collided

No One Ever Knew Who Won And Who Died

 

Author's Note

What can I say? I always have been so damn fanatic about the nature's all natural rivals like that, so don't mind me.

Reviews

[Blade & Blood (The ..]

lol Neat story/poem! It was really cool how you set the stage in the beginning because it was so simple, yet it seemed like so much was said in the first two lines. Even after that, I like how casual it sounds at first, and then the tone just transforms into this epic battle! XD I think my favorite is the fifth couplet; it seemed like a lot of thought was put into that line, and then the seventh was just pure genius!

The ending was a neat cliffhanger, too! Awesome job with this poem! I sincerely enjoyed reading it. :)

Ironically Yours, Blade and Blood

[Sean M. Addams]

another well done piece your poems are always crafted very well... nice job ...

[darkgurl]

This is most wonderful, I can feel this write, You can write a mean poem, like you writes. "In The Searches For The Victims To Take Slithering Around The Deadly Rattlesnake" Wonderful line here. I have a write called "Slither" Which is about enemies. I like your write wonderfully written.

[ganymeder]

I liked this, but especially the last part...

>Both Of The Worlds Have Ultimately Collided
No One Ever Knew Who Won And Who Died

[Yvette Shaw]

This poem set my senses on edge(a good thing) from the very first line. The story told flowed in such a way that it made me excited about what would happen next.

Same Deed As The Snake's, It's On The Stalk...This line was amazingly descriptive. Great write, with an excellent ending.
Yvette Shaw

[♥ Courtney &hear..]

Haha that was so spiffy! I loved it.