Breaking The Commandments

Everybody have their own personal temptations where they couldn't resist.

 

Thou Shalt Not Forget Thy Lord...

...And I Shall Throw Down The Sword

 

Thou Shalt Not Have Another Gods...

...And I Shall Laugh At All Of The Odds

 

Thou Shalt Not Take The Lord's Name In Vain...

...And I Shall Say It Right Out Loud In The Plain

 

Thou Shalt Not Skip The Lord's Day...

...And I Shall Look At It And Run Away

 

Thou Shalt Not Dishonor Thy Father And Mother...

...And I Shall Rebel One Way Or Way Of Another

 

Thou Shalt Not Give Out The Act To Kill...

...And I Shall Know And Keep The Thrills

 

Thou Shalt Not Commit Any Adultery...

...And I Shall Run Out As The Adversary

 

Thou Shalt Not Look For To Steal...

...And I Shall Take What's For Real

 

Thou Shalt Not Speak Of The Lies...

...And I Shall Close Both Of My Eyes

 

Thou Shalt Not Do Any Of The Covet...

...And I Shall Corrupt The Covenants

 

Author's Note

Please, don't forgive me for that I have sinned.

Reviews

[KayOss]

Don't worry; you're not forgiven. This is a wonderful piece. I really enjoyed reading it. It has a certain musicality that was infectious. For some reason, this put me in the mind of Corporate Avenger. I hope you don't mind the connection; my mind made it almost subconsciously. Anyway, I think we all spend our time searching out our truths, which can and will vary from person to person. Thanks for sharing.

[Carrie Montgomery]

i must say 1st that I like this b/c it is so unique, both in the writing style and the subject matter. Very true to human nature and sincerely honest in admission of not being "perfect" and free of sin- which in most cases none of us are yet claim to be and pass judgement on those who we deem "sinful".
Thou Shalt Not Dishonor Thy Father And Mother...

...And I Shall Rebel One Way Or Way Of Another"
we all go thru this "rite of passage" we must rebel against "them" in order to find "us".
"Thou Shalt Not Give Out The Act To Kill...

...And I Shall Know And Keep The Thrills"
very dark and mysterious!
I enjoyed reading, thanks for sharing. Look forward to reading more. Take care.

[Adel Eyes]

well thought out
nicely done

[Maya]

i love this!!! the lines about stealing and lies are my favorites! great job!

[The Archangel Gabriel]

I always wondered whether making a list of ten things not to do would just prove too much temptation for somebody! You proved my point! It was! Hahahahhahaha! Lmao!

Well written! Each commandment has its opposition. The circle is complete!

-Gabe

[closed]

Profound. Terrifying.

Friend. Please, if you can hear me.

Just as your other friends have spoken. Just as God speaks to you at this very moment.

Forgive yourself. For Jesus loves you.^^

[Jazmyne]

i think this relates to alot of pple! hehe i know i am one of them. i like how you described each sentance after. im not well known with all of this but what i do know is that everyone does something to make them sinners, but if they step up and admit to their wrongs....they can be forgiven and forgotten..good work!!

[Jessica Benfield]

oh, joseph... dont you worry, we are all wicked sinners, and we all sin, you're not alone in this, please dont put so much pain upon yourself, remember you are forgiven! correct me if im wrong, but by reading this, im guessing you believe in God and Jesus. i do as well, and Jesus died for our sins, we are all forgiven, and though i have no idea what you have done or what you are accusing yourself of, trust me, nothing is unforgivable...

this is a beautiful piece, it sort of convicts us all of our sins; gives us a reality check that none of us are anywhere near perfect, and we are all sinners. but i do wish you would cheer up =[ please, smile! =] lol

if you want to talk more about it, please email me...
hugs,
jess

[Pinky]

i agree beautiful word play... sining is in all of us... its the animal... sometimes we just cant help it... sure u have but have u heard george carlins bit on the 10 commandment... its on my play list on my bio if u havent...let me know if u have heard it or not and what u think of it... and again... awesome work!

[Brandon Taylor-Black]

LMAO! I Love this!
We all break rules, but the question really should be, is it out of malice, ignorance or just a genuine 'Mistake'
Wonderful wordplay, and the way you threw in a counter for every commandment...Amazing.
Bravo on this wonderful write.

[Kasey Klein]

Hey Joe.

A good play on opposites. Well-chosen words, playing well on each other.