Breaking The Commandments

Everybody have their own personal temptations where they couldn't resist.

 

Thou Shalt Not Forget Thy Lord...

...And I Shall Throw Down The Sword

 

Thou Shalt Not Have Another Gods...

...And I Shall Laugh At All Of The Odds

 

Thou Shalt Not Take The Lord's Name In Vain...

...And I Shall Say It Right Out Loud In The Plain

 

Thou Shalt Not Skip The Lord's Day...

...And I Shall Look At It And Run Away

 

Thou Shalt Not Dishonor Thy Father And Mother...

...And I Shall Rebel One Way Or Way Of Another

 

Thou Shalt Not Give Out The Act To Kill...

...And I Shall Know And Keep The Thrills

 

Thou Shalt Not Commit Any Adultery...

...And I Shall Run Out As The Adversary

 

Thou Shalt Not Look For To Steal...

...And I Shall Take What's For Real

 

Thou Shalt Not Speak Of The Lies...

...And I Shall Close Both Of My Eyes

 

Thou Shalt Not Do Any Of The Covet...

...And I Shall Corrupt The Covenants

 

Author's Note

Please, don't forgive me for that I have sinned.

Reviews

[KayOss]

Don't worry; you're not forgiven. This is a wonderful piece. I really enjoyed reading it. It has a certain musicality that was infectious. For some reason, this put me in the mind of Corporate Avenger. I hope you don't mind the connection; my mind made it almost subconsciously. Anyway, I think we all spend our time searching out our truths, which can and will vary from person to person. Thanks for sharing.

[just is]

Thou Shalt Not Forget Thy Lord...

...And I Shall Throw Down The Sword



Thou Shalt Not Have Another Gods...

...And I Shall Laugh At All Of The Odds



Thou Shalt Not Take The Lord's Name In Vain...

...And I Shall Say It Right Out Loud In The Plain

I loved this JOe, this is amazing work here.

[BenightedWhispers]

No worries at all. You're not accussed which means there is no need for forgiveness. I love it very much. Very honest and creastive. I feel the same way about most of them. ^^

[Lab Rat 1984]

An interesting take to the commandments. Wonderfully written.

[darkgurl]

I like this write, it shows another side of religion here, "Thou Shalt Not Speak Of The Lies...
...And I Shall Close Both Of My Eyes" I like this line right here, this says so much. Hear no and see no as well as speak no, very well written and put toegther....Kim

[Joseph - Michael]

Whoever think I'm making fun of the religion... Think again, I'm not doing anything to offend anyone. Pretty much just like Martin did with "Last Temptation Of Christ" and what Kevin did with "Dogma" and that goes the same with Mel who did "Passion Of The Christ" We all are doing those kind of stuffs to improvising and such. Sure, they were for the entertainments as well, but serious kinds only. We are not mocking or anything else like that...

By the way, it's COMPLETED...

[Eagle Cruagh]

I don`t quarrel with your belief or lack of it, but
what is your point ?

Any fool can make fun of religion and the religious
and most of us prefer not to. I find no clue in
your poem. Perhaps it is unfinished ?

---- Eagle Cruagh

[Blade & Blood (The ..]

Well, this was definitely a neat poem! It was definitely ballsy of you. lmao! It was pretty funny, too, when you were contradicting each commandment... That's definitely how life works and how religion fails miserably to help the resistance and temptation--I should know because I'm Catholic, the worst of them all! lol I especially like the fifth couplet, the one with dishonoring the parents- because that one is far too true! Thanks for posting this! It was highly entertaining and a great way to take a break from all of the conservative beliefs that surround me. ;)

Ironically Yours, Blade and Blood

[Valentine]

Joseph..all have sinned and come short of the glory of God..you will feel this way until oneday someone will be praying for you and He will walk into your heart..know know I will be having my whole congregation and myself prayiong for Him to call you..No one comes unless they are called..I pray for your heart to open to listen for the call..God bless...Valentine

Raw and confident. Poetry knows no boundaries, and this has met that criteria. I have to admit that is how I like poems and short stories to be in the first place. This was a real enjoyable read, and in a way, fact of life feels very evident here as well.

[Nicole Hellene]

No I'll forgive you because I'm God and I can do that sort of thing, and since you don't want to be forgiven, as punishment for blaspheme in my name, I shall forgive you. Hah!