Urban Madness 2: Requiem Of The Insanity

Before reading this one, you really need to read "Urban Madness" first in order to follow through.

 

Back Inside To The Mental Institution

Awaken From The Stench Of Abomination

 

Somewhere In The Room Without The Hole

Straightjacket Got Me All Covered Whole

 

Thought That My Brain's Already All Fried

But, They Only Begun By Getting Me All Riled

 

Could Hardly Hear The Others' Screams

Something About Poison In Their Ice Cream

 

Been Twisting And Feeding On The Dead Bugs

What I Hated The Most Is The Taste Of The Slugs

 

All Ready To Smash My Head Against The Wall

Problem Is That The Room Is Not That Tall

 

For Me To Stand Up And To Jump Around

The Orderly Got Me Pinned To The Ground

 

Beating Me Like Crazy With The Spiked Sticks

Until I've Bled Out And Gotten So Damn Sick

 

Watched My Sticky Blood Flown Out Slowly

Blacking Out The Ways Of Any Of The Unholy

 

Won't Be Able To See Any More Of The Horrid

Can't Sense Any More Of Those Morbid

 

Once More, Freed From The Sadness

Again, There Will Be No More Madness

 

Author's Note

If there's a lot of requests for me to make the third one, well then, be prepare to believe in the powers of another.

Reviews

[Rosalie Barrows]

I like how its like a continuation of them. Very well done. The words how you write just flow so well its just makes it more amazing. I love your work. You should make a book and publish all your poems and put them in there. I would so read it and buy it! I laughed when you mention the brain not because it was funny but it reminded me when I went to the "institute of living" I saw a real human brain in a jaw and it made me just to hypisitze to it! I never saw a real human brain before lol. It's so weird... lol *sry random


keep up the good work can't wait to read the 3rd one.


Laura

[Anna Writes]

this is a creepy-crazy story(with all those dead bugs and slugs..lol) but then the craziness had all end up with that sadness...good write by the way, i like how everything ryhmes and made sense, craziness with sense...:)

[TL Boehm]

chilling - the descent to madness - great visceral imagery in this one...mmm. eating bugs yes, that is graphic indeed. Well done.

[;]

oK...I cannot tell you my favorite lines caus ethen I'd be writing the whole poem down...And I'm kinda tired! loved EVERYTHING! Espeacially your madness...You could beat me...No you couldn't I'd still win! ;) lol
Yea its me...The one you Envy,
Mistress E

[Blade & Blood (The ..]

Huh... interesting. It sounds like pure torture to me. I really hope people in mental institutions really don't have to suffer through this... they may as well be in jail. :P

The beginning and middle seemed pretty surreal. The whole thing with bugs and slugs; pretty nauseating, but impressive nonetheless. :) I definitely admire the continuing style of this poem where the first one left off. It's as if you just wrote them both on the same day-- you know, a good flow. ^^ The ending was pretty sad, but at least the narrator is out of the terrible place. I guess suicide has its advantages, depending on the situation of course... the narrator did commit suicide, right?

As for structure, excellent as always. ^^ If you're really going to write a third one, then I can't wait to see what you've got left for us. ;)

Ironically Yours, Blade and Blood

[darkgurl]

Very well written and said, like this and the other oen these are very well written.

[cavscoutgh]

I seriously like this. I am not usually much of a dark poem loving kind of guy but this strikes a note and keeps it ringing in my head as I read it.

Kudos to you!

Gerry

[The Viking]

I thought the main character died in the first one - but maybe to him death was just a temporary passing out of consciousness. Either one is better than the world he's trapped in. However, could the abusive conditions of the asylum be real or just a product of his insanity? We don't know what he's afflicted with and for all we know, all the horrors he's heir to could be inside his head. Who knows?

[magyk13]

absoulutely love it!

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Well you better write another one.
Hey again!
I love you poem!
It is so . . .
There are no words to discribe it to me,
but i enjoyed it as much as the first.

[Stacy]

Humm, well, consider this your request. :o)