Urban Madness

While being locked up in the state hopsital, there's always a nightmare in every corners.

 

Somewhere Inside The Mental Institution

There Are Really Such Thing As Abomination

 

The Staffs Were The Way Of The Real Unholy

Even The Demon Disguised As The Orderly

 

Straightjackets Have Some Of The Chains

Sound Of The Long, Rustic Metals Are Pain

 

Make You Want To Cover Your Eyes And Scream

Wishing That It Was Nothing, Just Only A Dream

 

But, It's A Real Damn Nerve Wrecking Nightmare

And It Sure As Hell Definitely Will Not Go Anywhere

 

As The Countless Victims As Much Hapless

We All Are Very Lost And Totally Helpless

 

Until Came Along The Final Moment Of The Time

Ready To Die Rather Than Watching The Crimes

 

Never Will To Speak Any Of Those Unspeakable

Won't Be Able To Bear Closer To The Unbearable

 

Finally, All Freed Away From The Sadness

Also, There Will Be No More Of The Madness

 

Author's Note

There are much more to that, but if you really like it / love it, keep your eyes open for that there will be another one coming soon to the writerscafe.org near you.

Reviews

[♥ Courtney &hear..]

oh my goodness that was simply superb! "make you want to cover your eyes and scream...wishing that it was nothing, only a dream" . I loved how intense it was. I felt like i was watching the whole institution go about its daily activities of insanity. GOOD JOB!!!!!!

[Kena Dawn Augustine]

I like this one. Mainly because I feel crazy somtimes. hee hee!! The way you wrote it must be a certain form, because it follows two line sentence structures all the way down. And they rhyme! finally, a rhyming poem! i write with rhymes most the time too. The words you choose create strong imagrey, which pulls me in. My favorite ilne:

Straightjackets Have Some Of The Chains

Sound Of The Long, Rustic Metals Are Pain

Mainly because in my head I see the Grinch with his ghosts of Christmas past, draggin his chains through all of hell. which can be in a mental institution, right?

Finally, All Freed Away From The Sadness

Also, There Will Be No More Of The Madness


This last two stanzas really concludes the poem well, and gives us a sense of relief: oh....i hope there is no more madness.

good job. i look foward to other poems. can you read some of mine???

[lucia]

The last line brings a surprising end to your poem...what a wonderful contradiction, making it out as if the asylum IS the madness! Personally I would've centered my poem around that idea a little more, rather than the emotional side of it. Great poem!

[Yemaya Theresa]

Wonderfully vivid as if you are there and feeling all this yourself. The Institution is a metaphor for life. As we all live this at time during the Dark night of the soul. Beautiful.

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Your poem was amazing!
And I really do like it.
I will be keeping my eyes open
For the next one you write.

Its very descriptive! And the images brought on by the descriptions make me think of twisted unnatural images brought on by a person's delusional state. Great poem!

[Wolfwind Words]

Oh, reminds me of some dark and scary horror flick! I can't wait to read the next!

[Fantasyfairy]

The poem is brilliant. The vivid imagery, and the way you use the lanuguage is amazing. The only thing is that the lines are a little too long for it to really flow well, which was a little disturbing for me, but thats just me. There is darkness and pain in this one and I like that about it. It does make me wonder just how personal this piece is though. XX

[Brandon Taylor-Black]

I read them the wrong way round, but even so...they're easy to pick up...but hard to put down.
I absolutely love this write. It's a tremedous piece of Art.
Bravo!

[Rosalie Barrows]

This is so weird! I just went to a insane asylem yesterday and this reminded me so much of it! Just has that feeling deep inside that just has to let out sooner or later very well written. It almost feels like you where actually there. i like this very much. I'll read the other one right now.


Write more

laura

[Done]

I actually read the second one first, so I re-read both of these in order... and I must say it's incredibly interesting. You write this almost as if you've experienced this yourself in life, the way it's described, even in poetry, you can see it and feel it. It causes you to shiver at the thought. Great writing and a good read, thank you!

Josh