Coyote's Last Stand

In every life, there's always a breaking point when it comes to the reliazations.

 

In The Dusky Time Of The Twilight Gloaming

Brave, But The Lonely Coyote Was Roaming

He Heard The Sounds Of The Heavy Rumbling

Gotten All Confused With The Paws Trembling

So, Afraid And Went To Hide Behind The Trees

He Had The Need To Know What's There To See

Peeked Slowly And Spotted The Wolves On The Prowl

Together, The Pack Stopped And Began To Howl

He Became So Scared And Took Another Direction

In Order To Avoid The End Of His Own Destination

Later, Walked Away With The Startling Beady Eyes

Which He's All Ready To Start The Silent Soft Cry

Learned That He Really Believed To Be A Born Loser

Because It's Not Always The Best To Be A Loner

Looked Right Up To The Full Moon, Started Braying

Just Like In The Act Of The Mercy In The Praying

Was Hoping To Recieve Some Strong Signal For Help

But, Instead, There's A High Pitched Sound Of Yelp

The Pack Of The Wolves' Teeth Caved In Growling

Now, He Know That He's Not Alone, He Gave Out Yowling

Best Not To Die Alone, Need the Others To Be There, He Think

Finally, He Left The World With An Unusual Smirk And A Wink

 

Author's Note

Don't mind the "animalistic grammars". Just admit what you really think of the sorrow and sadness that turned around for better, just for a moment before death, so he can die happy, you know?

Reviews

[Wolfwind Words]

The imaging was good, but i got confused at the end. Did the coyote smile , because he died it a battle, that pack, even though not of his own, were there at the end. Or did he spot something greater then himself with in his heart or mind, that made him smile in the end. I like him smiling in the end, and the wink part. But i'm not sure about the unusual. I would have to ask to have that smile explained a little more, to truly feel the end. But thats just my opinion.
I think this has lots of potential, and an important moral lesson attatched.
Keep up the good work!

[just is]

This is wonderful could see the whole thing, wonderful write

[Blade & Blood (The ..]

Wow, that was kind of sad. :( As I read it through, I definitely felt the poor coyote's pain. Being left out is no fun, and dying alone must be a scary thing. :P This is a neat poem. You must've really put some effort into it. ^^

Ironically Yours.

[darkgurl]

"Learned That He Really Believed To Be A Born Loser
Because It's Not Always The Best To Be A Loner" I can relate to these words right here, this is a emotional and well written write....Kim

[Carrie Montgomery]

I think the "grammers and such" gave an animalistic style to the writing...like another coyote (or other animal) was telling the story.

[jen -- JG]

Forgetting everything else and just being the coyote for a moment - I sensed a feeling of age - as though he had once been in a pack but was now too old and feeble to stay - so by choice or design he was alone. This combination brings fear - when hunting in a pack there is great strength - alone - there is great fear.

The coyote seeks another direction to escape confrontation because he is aware he will lose this fight - and rather than be alone and die alone in the wilderness - he makes a decision and lets the pack know where he is. He has hope his old pack will also hear and come to his rescue -

Not to be - so this sick old and loney coyote once more lived fully - even if only for a few brave moments - and dies in battle - He obtained his wish, not to die alone - and surrounded by his own kind - he died happy.

The over all imagery was good and I got the felings of loniless and sadness here as well as the final joy of the coyote breathing his last as he wished.

from the essence of the story this is a good poem

Cheers

Jen

[justjenn_2u]

As I read this poem, I felt the coyote's pain. To feel so alone is inflicting. I was happy that he died as he wished. I like how you expressed the coyote's feelings in this poem.

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I think he's going to run around in spirit with the other wolves, that finally he sees his purpose - but I'm a romanticist. (This has got a perfect rap beat - up tempo a little at beginning, that makes the words work well at the ending of the lines so I think you wrote it that way.) This has interesting form, you are very creative. I don't know why but I kept getting a backdrop vision in my head like a street gang thing going on with the wolves forefront - pay no heed to me...great imagery created with rythm and words of feeling rather than descriptive, it works well. Best wishes.

[ganymeder]

I liked the mental picture it gave me, but I got confused at the end. I'm not sure about the yelp, smirk and wink. It seemed unclear towards the end what was happening and who you were talking about.

Was he happy because he wasn't dying alone even though the wolves were attacking him? Were they attacking someone else and he was going to get the scraps? I was a little confused.

Other than that, I liked the poem. :)

[[untitled]]

Oh my..........I love the trickster. I like your poem...but there are many words that hinder the reader from receiving it's fullness. I would cut.