Angel No More

It's pretty ironic; Loving someone when the person no longer love you back anymore.

 

The Wings Of The Angel Are Burning

Away To The Ash; Toward The Dust

Within All Of My Heart And Soul Yearning

For That I'm Still In Love With My Lust

 

Lusting For The Scent Of Her Love

Lusting For The Sight Of Her Love

Lusting For The Sound Of Her Love

Lusting For The Taste Of Her Love

Lusting For The Touch Of Her Love

 

Giving Everything All Up, Even The Eternity

All Just For In The Name Of The Love

Entering Into The Realm Of The Mortality

All Just For One Woman Whom I Truly Love

 

Lusting For Her Scent For Me To Smell

Lusting For Her Sight For Me To See

Lusting For Her Sound For Me To Hear

Lusting For Her Taste For Me To Please

Lusting For Her Touch For Me To Feel

 

Now That She Had Forsaken Me

Refusing To Allow Me To Love Her

My Heart No Longer Beats, Only To Bleed

I Won't Give Up On Her, I'll Wait For Her

 

Still Lusting For Her Scent To Return

Still Lusting For Her Sight To Return

Still Lusting For Her Sound To Return

Still Lusting For Her Taste To Return

Still Lusting For Her Touch To Return

 

The Angel Wings Are Still Burning All Away

As I'm Still Waiting For The Return Of My Love

Right Now, All I Can Do Nothing, But To Pray

For The Returning Into The Embrace Of My Love

 

Author's Note

I know that it may be a bit too much of repetition, but she happen to loves music, that's why I got "lost in the world of the music". Also, this writing is somewhat inspired by the song, "Wish I Had An Angel" by Nightwish.

Reviews

[Wolfwind Words]

I feel that it may have been "that to much" that made it just right!
I brings a story to us of love and love lost, and how strongly people attach to certain people.
I find that this is poem that brings a great lesson of morality with it.
It is so true, for so many people love so strong and so deep, that it's hard to move on. And all thats left to calm them, is the memories and the hope of their return.
Great writing!

[ThexUnspeakablexRomance]

This really was beautiful. It shows just what it's like when you have fallen over the edge in love with someone. And it isn't too much because that's what love is. It's not subtle and it's not too little. I feel for you when I read this. Amazing job!

[Magicant]

The inspiration has gone a long way towards the end product. This piece is very musical, even without the repetition.
I like the burning of the wings imagery: the destruction of the most blatant symbol of angelic superiority. Something like the dropping of a halo? Perhaps that explains the shifting from love to lust...

Well done.

I think everyone has been here at one time or another and your poem describes the raw emotions of rejection, lust, and love and how it feels when those feelings are not reciprocated. Its like rubbing salt into an open wound. I love the lines

"Now That She Had Forsaken Me

Refusing To Allow Me To Love Her

My Heart No Longer Beats, Only To Bleed

I Won't Give Up On Her, I'll Wait For Her"

shows the torture the subject of the poem is feeling. He is suffering and I feel every word of it!
Great job!

[Me]

I don't think it was a bit too much. You did a wonderful job of expressing the way you feel, and the pain of wanting your love back. The pain of loving someone that doesn't love you anymore, or never did is a sad thing, but it makes for wonderful poetry. Great Job in expressing yourself.

[A.r. Bazian]

my friend...
your heart is your own... and your lover's to love!
there's nothing called too much, if spoken in words of love!
touching... and true...
an enjoyable poem... a really enjoyable poem... and i mean enjoyable as in its beauty, not in its pain...
out of my own experience (which might not meet yours or any other), i know that ppl like you (and perhaps me) have reached to something others die only dreaming to feel, to know... thats love!
and love... is worth it!
as your heart is true to you...
love will always be there...
"love is not to be found in someone else but ourselves, we simply awaken it. but it order to that, we need the other person."
nothing is too much!
a good poem...
keep it up!

[SPINNING ON that dizzy ..]

There is an intensity to this that just makes you move as you read it - no doubt. There is a lot of hurt in here - so very disappointing when things don't turn out the way you want them to - especially when you are feeling things so deeply - especially when there was love there... and now it is gone.... some glimpses you saw that made you think there was more.... it hurts. Very well expressed here.

Kath

[Catrinka]

My favorite lines are at the beginning:
The Wings Of The Angel Are Burning
Away To The Ash; Toward To The Dust
Within All Of My Heart And Soul Yearning
For That I'm Still In Love With My Lust

Really powerful - your poem speaks of deep emotion, which is hard to shake, and hope dies hard.
Just a little side-note - I too vote for losing the capital letters -

[Poeticpiers]

one can lust without love but can onelove without lust.The flames of passion burn away the lust but love remains amongst the ashes left behind a stray breeze can rekindle the flames. True love is free to come and go.It must come to you willingly or not at all

[BL00DY-K1TTEN]

i love this poem. i love the fact the poem says:

Giving Everything All Up, Even The Eternity

All Just For In The Name Of The Love

Entering Into The Realm Of The Mortality

All Just For One Woman Whom I Truly Love

it shows love should more likely be called sacrificial love. because thats what it really is.

great job. keep writing. keep being insipired

- BL00DY-K1TTEN

[Misa]

Wow.. intriguing write you have here, tho l think it could use a few fine tunings. nothing major, though - more cutting out certain words here and there, such as
"Toward To The Dust" - the "to" here isn't needed
"All Just For In The Name Of The Love" - "for" can be taken out
"Now That She Had Forsaken Me" - l think it should be "has"?
"Of The Mortality" - this one l'm not positive of, but in general referring to it as "The mortality" makes it seem like a physical thing rather than a concept. figured l'd point it out, but don't take me as the last word.

aside from these few nitpicks - which to me seemed more like it was from being translated from another language? - this was QUITE well done. well enjoyedd.
~Misa