Empty

I don't know man

The air tightens around your skin
You gasp for breath
Attempt to keep your head above the surface
You can feel it dragging you down
Like a millstone tied to your feet
Your eyes train to remain open
Your fingers grab in the void
Searching for something, someone, to hold on to

There’s nothing there
The air closing in on you is empty
You are blinded by darkness
Deafened by silence
All is empty

You’re alone.

Reviews

[SleeplessVolcano]

You captured so well that horrible empty feeling!

Just one comment about the use of the word "rock", which is perfectly fine and creates a powerful image, dragging the writer into deeper waters, but I couldn't but think of the word "millstone" which would a much larger rock and possibly amplify the image you are trying to create.

[Renee]

Thanks you! Millstone does look nicer in this context, indeed. :)

[Arsh]

Very heartfelt write.. written with some great efforts of yous. Nice flow of ink!

[Renee]

Thank you! :D