Confused and Alone!

She sits on the bathroom floor with her eye linear running down her checks,
as she feels a single drop fall down her face she wipes it away.
all confused and alone.
wondering why?
why did he do this to me again?
why did i trust him?
he said he loved her,
and wouldn't hurt her,
because whenever she is hurt,
he can feel the pain.
thinking to herself,
no more going back to him,
he's gonna hurt u again.
she reliezes she has to let go,
and if she keeps going back to him,
he is gonna think he can control her.
Well, he can't control her and she dont wanna be hurt again.
by now she has proberly cried a river over one guy that doesnt matter!

Reviews

[KayleeLegend]

This is so true. I think every girl has had these feelings come to her once, or even a couple of times. You painted a really good picture of the things that are going on in the story. I'm not a big fan of say "she don't wanna be hurt again." I don't know if you did that for the poem on purpose or if there's an alternative reason. I guess grammar would be my only concern. Other than that, I see a great amount of potential in your work, and I look forward to seeing more from you.

[Sam]

It's really sad that so many women fall for lies and plain BS that men will feed them. But I can understand the need. The desire to believe and do whatever he says. (and I'm so screwed when that reliable person isn't there anymore) It's still written wonderfully. I love the poem.

[Chenyrene Winchester]

Thank you all for the reviews(:

[Walter Scott Morrison]

I see this happen so often and it blows my mind

[questionable]

its very straight forward. i like it. my favorite line is "she sits on the bathroom floor with her eye liner running down. i can see that in my mind.