IN MOTION

In motion I am on my way
A city I leave behind
Lights like fireflies dance
In the distance,
each one fading farther away
Autumn in It's last day...

I am aware looking out my widow
I sit in my chair making
Sense of my view,
The train askew sitting on it's tracks
Set to my destination,
She is waiting at her station
She is who I want to see...

The weekend is upon us
Wars we will wage
in love and lust
Before death, before dust
We will create memories
of smiles and trust
Her love has brushed my soul

And so I sit in my chair
Train askew set to it's destination
She in waiting at her station...

Reviews

[Judy Ponceby]

Sir Rene...simply beautiful. Especially liked these lines:

Wars we will wage
in love and lust
Before death, before dust
We will create memories
of smiles and trust

[Mo'Kha]

A beautiful ode to "hope"...blessings, ~M

[Aidz]

Another kewl write Rene, one of longing and waiting :)

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

Very nice, it seems different to me. A very good different... enjoyed.

[Kenneth The Poet]

Heavy piece. A look into what thoughts occur before and after we fight with our significant other, and even the fallout if the bliss does not last.

[Tkess]

I can feel the bittersweet in this. We all feel that from time to time. Longing for another, whether they're a hundred miles away or just one. I like the line, "Lights like fireflies dance In the distance, each one fading farther away"

[Hannah Paige]

The flow and imagery work beautifully to create an elegant and gentle piece. The sweetness of this poem feels to me almost like a melody, and i found myself trying to put music to your words i read. Very well done, as usual.

[Ruth]

Beautiful piece, one that makes the reader interested in not only the "she" but also on another level also, cleverly delivered love xoxo

[Coyote Poetry]

Strong images create by this amazing poem. I like the ride to a safe place and to a special person. Allow us to think and be thankful for the opportunity. A very nice ending to a excellent poem.
Coyote