LIPS SO COLD

drips from the faucet
a reminder of times pendulum
the age of family portraits
I, the abandoned soul trapped
in earths orbit, and lively
hours pay the price...

life has loved me twice
though it is meager as mice
left to my own device
precise, my poetry will suffice...

water ice laced with lice
I consume to hold the ice flow
strip my clothes and expose my soul
a verbal plateau is where I welcome fights
and of life I let go

behold I embrace my spirituality
and kiss the Queen of mortality
of lips so cold her hair of snow
I cherish given hospitality
I bottle her glow
and bring warmth to her brutality...

Author's Note

John Doe is me, didn't mean it to sound morbid, just meant as me in my purest form when I write my poetry...

Reviews

[Judy Ponceby]

Just from how you wrote this I got that you were John Doe. A most excellent piece of work Rene. You out do yourself time and again. Always rhythmic. Some brutal imagery in there, well done.

[Marie Harrison]

My favorite stanza was the opening of the poem.

drips from the faucet
a reminder of times pendulum
the age of family portraits
I, the abandoned soul trapped
in earths orbit, and lively
hours pay the price...

Nice!

[joshua deathdealer]

Wonderful in every way...Excellent work.

[Tkess]

Humility and being thankful for what one has, however large or small. Cherish life as we live it because we only get one. very nice write, my good man.

[MS. BABy]

this is ur world I just enjoy the output, I liked this is was different from some of your others we ain't allhappy...smile, but we love to live in this skin...

[brenda]

beauitiful poem !:)

[Aidz]

Its hard to comment when your writes are this good, but hell its masterful as always

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

Love the picture of the lips you used, and the title... greatly written, love the imagery, and as you said in your Author's Note "John Doe is me" really nice how you did this

[Coyote Poetry]

Strong description in the poem. Create a vision of a place where I don't want to go. I like the direct and honest words. Ending of the poem was outstanding. Sometime we will accept what we are given. Thank you for a excellent poem.
Coyote

[Bailey C. Writing]

:) I had to favorite this, it was great!
behold I embrace my spirituality
and kiss the Queen of mortality
Great lines right there...you did such a good job here, I don't even know what else to say!