FIVE DAYS A WEAK

A pay raise, extra change
but not within my budget
and I find that strange
left wanting more from
commodities I exchange
like being trapped
in a marriage where
the love is prearranged
a gun to the head
without a practice range
I have baggage unclaimed...

dipped and pummeled
by the waves of s**t
that floats downstream
traversing slippery rocks that
tumbled mans dreams
but my image is clean
stuck between
a rock and a rat race
to occupied to even think straight

Tony the Tiger says they're great
and I agree at a quarter to eight
at the bus stop I wait...to greet
the bus driver with Colgate breath
pay my bus fare and sit next to death...

Reviews

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

Nice lines that are so powerful and real to life... nicely said and written, i like this; especially this part:
"traversing slippery rocks that
tumbled mans dreams of late
but my image is clean
stuck between
a rock and a rat race"

[~ Vicki ~]

raw and real.... stuck and still day dreaming....

[Judy Ponceby]

Jeepers.....that's sooooo wow. I think I better get out while I can... Well penned, and very emotive. And unfortunately all too true for the majority of folks.

[DONALD EISSLER]

your words always reflex on something one feels but has never been able to put in words ...thank you for that
tk

[joshua deathdealer]

"stuck between a rock and a rat race" That line says so much. Love the pic ^.^

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Th pliable feelings that rush through us and can only be released with the stopping of the mundane, well written

[MS. BABy]

this was good...had me smiling the whole time I read it...

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

I feel this way every time I get paid. Awesome writing Rene........"scratch, scratch" :)

[Kenneth The Poet]

I agree with this, the frustration of the working drone life will get to me again someday.

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

This poem not only has frustration, but explains exactly where it comes from.
You wrote with an iron fist.