I heard a song today

I wrote this in a minute or so. Inspired by weird music and fantasies.

It made me think of you and me in a room,

Lit only by the moonlight cheating their way through my blinds,

Bouncing on our skin, 

I see your face,

It appears as if I'm looking into a casket,

Only because you look like the angel I never believed in,

I kiss you, i see your smile burst a hole in my heart,

As if I knew this would be the last time i'll ever see you.

Author's Note

Any feedback is appreciated

Reviews

[Nameless]

the imagery is so inspiring and is what I find so astounding and personal about writing, especially this piece. love it. right on :)

[Kristine Ferg]

Very beautiful and personal. "It appears as if I'm looking into a casket,
Only because you look like the angel I never believed in," absolutely astounding!

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

Great vivid imagery! :)

[theopenbook]

wow:) simply said so many things in just a few lines:) i really love it:) you write beautiful verse:)