I liked the conciseness of this one. I liked the clarity of its language. Mostly, though, I liked reading an end of relationship poem on this site that did not adhere to the themes of either "Can't live without you, baby," or "You tore out my heart and stomped that sucker flat."
Posted 3 Years Ago
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3 Years Ago
Thanks for the review. Its a story of learning and growing.
It's always kindly to recognize a smile and I think the gesture of buying the flowers and then giving them to a stranger is an act of beauty; this says so much in a short poem.
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Best, B.
I know you didn't mean to "show off" yourself, but this poem shows the narrator (presumably you) to be an amazing example of what we should all do more of in life, celebrate the hurts by making some sunshine in the present moment. This is precious & flowing & consciousness-probing. So much feeling is hiding in little pockets of these actions, such as the unspoken feeling you must've had toward the flower vendor, wanting to give him some business, then the human connections go on & on. So many times we poets lament the lack of connection in these covid times, but forget to show the world what it looks like to celebrate when we were able to be out there, freely connecting! This is a memorable poem! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie
I liked the conciseness of this one. I liked the clarity of its language. Mostly, though, I liked reading an end of relationship poem on this site that did not adhere to the themes of either "Can't live without you, baby," or "You tore out my heart and stomped that sucker flat."
Posted 3 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
3 Years Ago
Thanks for the review. Its a story of learning and growing.
This little piece tells me quite a bit about the type of person you are. Considerate and thoughtful. There is much joy in giving, even to a stranger. You found some courage.
Beautiful poetry. Simple in format and yet has great depth of feeling and is visual with it.
I am mesmerized by your work. You leave so much up to the imagination and to the reader's own experiences. This touches me personally on many levels, and I love the look and the sound of the piece. Your work reveals a deep understanding of yourself, and an ability to find the smile and or the lesson in life's mysteries. I will return to read more.
Writing....Thinking....
Most of my pieces are imagined as monologues.
I've been a fan ever since I first saw my first live show as a kid.
I consider myself pretty abstract.
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