Other'd

the others

Other'd

to suffer

with others

abandoned

on the fringe

of a heartless

civilization

Catcalled

by blood thirsty

gatekeepers

Sleep walking

killing dreams

dreaming to kill

Defending

the hurdles

that estrange

all brothers

Failing

to put an end

to the pointless

dissolution

I return

to the familiarity

of my own kind

In the safety

and security

of where

I belong

Laying claim

to the

sweetest

comforts

as a birth right

Do not ask

me about

any others

then

I don't

give a damn

about anyone

else

Author's Note

we forget rather quickly.

Reviews

[Writergurl]

Goodness this is one strong powerful write here, nicely expressed.
loved the emotion in this.

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

Thanks for the review. I appreciate it.

[Carlos Lorenzo Estrada]

This is a very strong and powerful truth spoken in these words. To me it speaks of the comforts we find within our individual cultures. Being a person of color myself this resonates with me, especially back in my youth growing up. Thank you for sharing your art.

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

Thanks for the review. It was right on the money.

[VelvetPotato]

It is so easy to feel good and validated from echo chambers. It is difficult to elegantly debate and be with others who disagree and challenge your opinion. This piece really makes me think of the COVID times. How we are more divided than ever, how opinions are so contrasting, people constantly arguing on what is the right thing to do. I really enjoyed this minimalistic write that packed a punch.

[h d e rushin]

thence, from that place and from the circumstance; all poems are in the present tense. They have no worldly analogy. It predicatively belongs to the poets reasoning, only. "The only one capable of articulating the transcendent nature of things, the poet is the one who can identify the "symbols" and "emblems" of the world", Emerson wrote. There is too much left on the table of theanthropism. So we foolishly ascribe both human and divine characteristics to our God.

We don't even have control of our own emotions anymore, at least not after Covit. You wrote this like a person standing on a hill wanting reason to strike down it's reflexive hammer on a humanity that only providence can subordinate. Yet people are too small for the questions you've presented here. i feel you brother!

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

Thanks for reading and posting such a thoughtful review. Every time you start banging those keys, I learn something.

[Betty Hermelee]

There is a lot in this poem; one thing i got out of it is that you don't have to be with people who are disturbing to you or make you angry or uncomfortable. This could also be about racial injustice, or the divide between the rich and the poor. It has lots of implications. In addition, some people just are into themselves and don't give a damn about YOU!!! Powerful write
Best, Betty

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

Thank you for a very insightful review.

[Betty Hermelee]

You’re very welcome!

[Poetic Beauty]

Many times in this world people continue to only care about theirselves. It’s a me me me world where many thing things only revolve around them and if you don’t think, believe or give them all the attention, they want nothing to do with “you”

[jenniewren (J.W. Bouwma..]

There's a lot to ponder here. I read this last night, and wanted to take some time before commenting. I enjoy the little parcels of words, the way you have laid this out. The concept of hiding within one's safety zone because everywhere else is so unwelcoming, unsafe is a seductive one, isn't it? But ultimately self destructive in its own right, I think...

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

Long time...no see. thanks for the visit and the review. Youre right...retreating into the darkness is no good.

[barleygirl]

I do not believe you wrote this as a treatise on social distancing due to the pandemic, but I'm catching hints of that. V2: people "on the fringe" (isolated) . . . V3: "gatekeepers" are those who assign themselves the task of calling out any who break the social-distancing or mask rules . . . V5: some criticize social "hurdles" imposed while other defend the need for protecting each other . . . V7: some social distancing rules say people can gather freely ONLY with those they live with. My overall interpretation of your poem veers during your final 3 verses: in today's divisive political climate, along with distancing imposed by restrictions, we become bunkered within our groups, not giving a s**t about what's going on in the other groups. But aside from this covid read, I could also see your poem as a statement about the division between cultures or ethnicities. However interpreted, it's powerful inventive writing (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

Wow. I am honored to receive such a thoughtful review. Thank you for reading.

[VelvetPotato]

^ that was an amazing annotation Margie. You perfectly articulated the "feeling" I got from this write.

[barleygirl]

Thanks, VP . . .

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

There's vivid imagery of anger and hate. Nicely penned.

"Laying claim
to the
sweetest
comforts
as a birth right" I really like this part.

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

Thanks for reading and reviewing. Much appreciated.

[Patricia]

This is a powerful piece and dark. I like dark. :)

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

Thank you taking time to read. :)