Very clever poem using grammar and math to equal love.... but I guess whoever read it didn't appreciate it your originality so good for you, you never changed your mind...this a a really intelligent metaphor....
Nice!
Best, B
This is pumping with cleverness, as far as playing on the idea of love-as-academic-test. Always love made-up words as strong as your title . . . shows your inventiveness & how you're observant about what letters different words share & how they can be linked up. For me, writing is often about arranging words more than being immersed in the meaning. For a metaphorical poem like this, the meaning is wide open for the taking, as each reader sees fit. I love this line: "You could give me no credit without showing my work"! (((HUGS)) Fondly, Margie
Wow, wow, and wow. The simple complexity of this poem is just amazing. So many great thoughts -- that some people believe love is just an immutable force, and others believe it is something you do -- it is so absolutely true, and explains the disconnect in so many relationships. ``````
logaoedic, love is, Zietgeist. Marked by the mixture of several rhythms. Patience, which true love is,
is a noun. But patient is an adjective, not hasty or impetuous, which love is also. There is a
wonderful interplay of time and tense going on here. The beginning, the conditional-emotional
present, and the contrite, overbearing past.....
beautifully written my friend....dana
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
Really appreciate that wonderful review.
Thank you for reading.
-- ohhhhhhhh... this is a bazooka... -- R., you smashed all the glass in my building... -- sometimes we lose the universe of bliss which is almost within reach because of our choice of words (rather perspectives)... and we turn into the worst enemies of those we supposedly love... -- can there really be a ferocious argument about the definition of love ? ... i guess so... and it could turn ugly and nasty... -- i don't think i could ever calculate the 'quantity' of love though... it's too abstract a concept for me... -- excellent work... one of your best pieces i think...
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
Thanks for the best review ever! We feel love in different ways. I've learned that sometimes loving .. read moreThanks for the best review ever! We feel love in different ways. I've learned that sometimes loving a person is not enough. Sometimes we must get out of our comfort zone and love others in a way that they understand. Nothing extreme..:p...just make sure they feel loved. :)
8 Years Ago
-- ah... sage advice... and you're very welcome... :)
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