The Sound of Ayn

An analytical piece drowned in wailing stigmas.

Part I- To Me

I spent... in which I mean, I explained, all my scars that you now see as stains.

I don’t apologize for what I gave, because the truth is... what remains.

I forgive your accuracy and your aim. I promise it’s not in vain.

I wish to tell you, I’m not insane. In fact, I’m out of my brain.

But, it’s a process of thoughts I need to train.

A provocative onslaught I try to refrain.

But, I can’t help it, to me it’s plain.

To your avoidance, I complain.

To your annoyance, I feign.

To me, you drain.

 

Part II- To You

 Flooded. I forgive like the rain.

Grow my sweet seed and release the pain.

For what I have, I truly cannot contain

The weaker spark that once was a flame...

So take your piece, it doesn’t fit your name.

For peace, I’ll look up from whence I came.

Hoping, never again... because different isn’t the same.

Reviews

[SasukiMimochi]

-tilts head- this reminds me of something. i'll probably think of it later, but i've been having trouble sleeping and so im not reading too well. it sounds nice though. i'll re-read it when i get over my insomnia.

[Frank G. Myers Jr]

I love this man. Very thought provoking, nice flow of words. It glides right through. Amazing piece of art right there.

[Jazique]

Really has a rhym to it, wonderfully writtern, and awesome job in all.

[No regret]

wonderful write , i liked .

[India Brooks]

The layout, the structure, the rhythm and flow! All spectacular!
I especially like the line:
" Flooded. I forgive like the rain."

I am looking forward to reading more (:

[.]

interesting and well written great use of monorhyme, doesn't feel forced.well done

[My Fair Lady]

One sided relationships where one person is always pouring, forgiving and praying.. but the other is always soaking up the rain. Someone is hurting...
"because different isn't the same" is it. I feel a strength in this piece that I can totally comprehend. Very nice.

[china]

Wow! This is a wonderful piece, very unique. I like it.

[nothing]

This was a very deep poem, filled with an emotion that makes people want to know what, or whom, you may be writing about. You did a great job with this and it is a marvelous poem to read.

[boyinblue]

:) read it twice, still can't decide the words that would fit a solid review for this. Simply unique.