Naughty

 

Sunlight bounces
Off the shining green water
Murky and deep

Jewel, blue dragonflies
Flit about the surface

Alighting on the grass
Growing from a cluster
Of boiling hot rocks

Down below tiny minnows
nibble at my toes

My feet slip
On the algae covered rocks

As I lie on a larger rock
Absorbing the red heat
Of the faraway sun

In a nearby clump of grass
Two dragonflies land
Naughty dragonflies!
Where is your shame?

Reviews

[* Mourning Starr *]

Sunlight bounces
Off the shining green water
Murky and deep

Jewel, blue dragonflies
Flit about the surface

Alighting on the grass
Growing from a cluster
Of boiling hot rocks

Down below tiny minnows
nibble at my toes

My feet slip
On the algae covered rocks

As I lie on a larger rock
Absorbing the red heat
Of the far away sun

In a nearby clump of grass
Two dragonflies land
Naughty dragonflies!
Where is your shame?

what a beautifully written poem with great flow and amazing imagery, I loved it ....great job

[Laughing Lunatic]

Beautifully writtin!!! Sweet yet playful. I really enjoyed it!!! =)

[Celtic Cat]

"dragonflies getting jiggy with it" has got to be the funniest thing I've ever heard. This is such a great little piece, it brings us tranquility with a splash of laughter - fun!!! Don't you just love nature? I can tell by this writing that you do. Good stuff!!

[Madelaine]

This was a beautiful poem. I really enjoyed your description.

I love the word murky. It just sounds pretty to me, even though it's the opposite. XD

"My feet slip
On the algae covered rocks

As I lie on a larger rock
Absorbing the red heat
Of the far away sun" -You make everything sound so peaceful, yet I get the giggles as I read the last stanza. Those naughty dragonflies. XD

Great poem, thanks for entering.

[Matt Johnson]

I really dug the imagerey and the diction. You really came through establishing the bouncy, yet somber tone of the piece...

[R. Thomas Dinsmore]

opps points

[R. Thomas Dinsmore]

Interesting ... Like your imagery