"In The Presence Of Sorrow"

I sat in the presence of sorrow today

With occupied souls of relentless dismay,

 

Their eyes were fogged with salty tears

From embracing memories of yesteryears,

 

Anger arrived with resentment in tow

To steal loves intent to mend tomorrow,

 

The mood grew heavy with no resolute

Leaving hearts amiss and destitute,

 

A journey withdrawn without insight

Why death destroyed without care or slight,

 

Hearts and minds could not comprehend

Why a youthful life should suddenly end,

 

We thrive to believe in a far better place

Where souls find peace and amazing grace,

 

Our hearts find comfort with each new dawn

With assured rebirth when this flesh is gone,

 

While sorrow still lingers a silver lining arrays

Love will still find tomorrow through firm denseness of haze,

 

So, it is now in somber I collect my heart

And go on my way 'til my time depart.

Author's Note

What do you think?

Reviews

[SusanB]

Very nice, filled with so much emotion.

[alesuriko]

Very nice, good rhyming. I really enjoyed the first two stanzas. The flow and the rhythm was very powerful. After that, the rhythm started to wane. The message and the tone throughout the poem, however, was very clear. Although I'm not one of those people who strives to believe in that "after-life" stuff, it was a good poem about death and grieving. To each their own, as everyone grieves in different means. Well done with the poem.

[EMW]

This was very good.

[ashley]

This is good. I liked the rhyming. Great job! :D

[N.E.T.]

You did a great job with rythm and rhyming in this piece. Very pretty, and a peaceful end. Nice work!