Penned this today as a song, actually. It might need a little tweaking yet, as I'm still moving back and forth between the poetry and the music...but I think I'm going to like it in the end.
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I loved this poem. Filled with life and positive and needed energy.
"So stop your talkin’…talkin’…talkin’,
Every word is bought and sold.
My feet are walkin’…walkin’…walkin’,"
I like the above lines and thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote
Down that ‘Ain’t Lookin’ Back’ road.
Posted 8 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
8 Years Ago
Thank you, Coyote.
So glad you liked it.
I appreciate that you popped over to read and.. read moreThank you, Coyote.
So glad you liked it.
I appreciate that you popped over to read and comment, and you're right...we need more positive energy around us. There's never too much of that!
Lookin' down that long straight stretch of highway is perfect for what you've written, RW. Looking ahead or looking back the road exemplifies both views. This could easily be one of those angry country tunes that are sung in a smoky bar over too many whiskies.
I see it's been up here for awhile, so how'd you make out in the end?
'Ain't Lookin Back' Road'
ReedWrite,
Making a change where change is needed; this one is a encouraging a brave declaration of the importance of breaking away from toxicity and pain.
Kathy
This is just an amazing poem.
The way its written out, what its about, the rhyme scheme is brilliant to.
I just love this so much saving it to my reading list.
This reminds me of a almost 5 year relationship my sister finally walked away from, and that's what I was thinking of when I read this.
I'm sure plenty of people can relate to this.
One of the best poems I have read on this sight!
Posted 8 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
8 Years Ago
Thank you Cimmy...I'm so glad you enjoyed it.
I think all of us have been in one of those 'ai.. read moreThank you Cimmy...I'm so glad you enjoyed it.
I think all of us have been in one of those 'ain't lookin' back road' relationships. Thank you so much for the read and review.
I loved this poem. Filled with life and positive and needed energy.
"So stop your talkin’…talkin’…talkin’,
Every word is bought and sold.
My feet are walkin’…walkin’…walkin’,"
I like the above lines and thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote
Down that ‘Ain’t Lookin’ Back’ road.
Posted 8 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
8 Years Ago
Thank you, Coyote.
So glad you liked it.
I appreciate that you popped over to read and.. read moreThank you, Coyote.
So glad you liked it.
I appreciate that you popped over to read and comment, and you're right...we need more positive energy around us. There's never too much of that!
I got a strong woman vibe like a speeded kind of Patsy Clines "Walking after midnight" tune in my head while parsing this.
I dabble lyrically and play guitar and would love to put this to music (after Thanksgiving week).
This is cool.
Posted 8 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
8 Years Ago
Very cool...I learned to play guitar when I was twelve...my first attempts at poetry were songs. I'v.. read moreVery cool...I learned to play guitar when I was twelve...my first attempts at poetry were songs. I've put this one to music...but I've always thought it would be awesome to hear what melody other musicians hear when they read the words. And while I'm not a country music fan, for the most part, I do have a few I like. Patsy Cline is one of them! You're just so full of surprises, Tony! In a good way, of course. :D
8 Years Ago
Well thank ya kindly little lady
Now how say you we hit the next hoe-down for a few 'doh-se-d.. read moreWell thank ya kindly little lady
Now how say you we hit the next hoe-down for a few 'doh-se-dohs".
Psst ...thats sooi cool on the 6-string at that age. I tip my hat to ya.
LOL...omg...tell me you don't line dance!
Yes...I picked up guitar almost immediately. Loved .. read moreLOL...omg...tell me you don't line dance!
Yes...I picked up guitar almost immediately. Loved it. Had a 12-string by the time I was a junior in high school, but now I'm back to a 6-string ovation guitar...which I've had for...OMG...a long, long, LONG, time. :D
8 Years Ago
Noooo!
Dont line dance - someone once said if Hitler had won the war we'd all be dancin' tha.. read moreNoooo!
Dont line dance - someone once said if Hitler had won the war we'd all be dancin' that way.
I wanna.learn salsa.
But I never played a 12-string
Have a 6'string semi-acoustic and Im shopping for a baritone ukelele coz same chords as a 6 but tiny body for traveliing.
I learned guitar by ear. An ancient axe that had such high action it cut my fingers to ribbons but when I got my first proper guitar, felt like stroking velveteen.
Love my 6 too.
Lol
8 Years Ago
I can relate to that. My first guitar was horrible...I think my dad paid like $12 for it...with stee.. read moreI can relate to that. My first guitar was horrible...I think my dad paid like $12 for it...with steel strings. OMG. LOL. Nasty on the fingers. But when you get a nice one...ooooolala! Almost orgasmic! :D
Hello, Reed! :)
I think it has great rhythm and a strong, clear message. I really like "toxic con".
When can we hear it sung?
Posted 8 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
8 Years Ago
LOL...I have no idea how to record it to post here...but I'll work on that. Thank you, Mattavelli. A.. read moreLOL...I have no idea how to record it to post here...but I'll work on that. Thank you, Mattavelli. Appreciate the read and review.
strong lyrical song writing if you ask me! i have owned, built and ridden HD motorcycles all my life (almost 68;) ) and that pic is perfect for your poem ..i see the adventure ahead just as i ride .. every time .. i am probably not reading correctly but this verse seems to hiccup ..so i offered some alternatives in parenthesis .. what do you think?
You always ‘promise I’ll (I will or that I'll) change’,
But we’ve been down that road.(before)
So many meaningless lies,
(Its)Time to reap (just)what we’ve sowed (sown)
i love the message ... the story ...its timeless in the world of love, Country, The Blues, or good ol' Rock 'n Roll! i agree with Barley about the repetition .. it works great! do you ever put tunes to thing? plink around with the guitar or piano??
E.
Posted 8 Years Ago
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8 Years Ago
Thank you, Einstein!
Riding a motorcycle is on my bucket list!
Appreciate your commen.. read moreThank you, Einstein!
Riding a motorcycle is on my bucket list!
Appreciate your comments...and I'll look at reworking that phrase.
I love it when a poet/songwriter uses a repeating refrain but takes the time to craft it a little differently for each verse. To me, this is the ultimate in song crafting, when a writer doesn't take the easy way & just repeat everything six times verbatim. I can certainly relate to this message, since I've been one to walk away most often, not taking much crap from men anymore these days! *smile* (((HUGS))) I love the catchy title, too.
Posted 8 Years Ago
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8 Years Ago
Thank you, Barleygirl! I love that you don't take much crap from men anymore...I am right there with.. read moreThank you, Barleygirl! I love that you don't take much crap from men anymore...I am right there with you, sister! High five. LOL. I find, these days, while I love the species, I don't need them anymore, to feel fulfilled or validated or important. I've found that validation...or am finding it...from within. It's a journey, no doubt, but one all of us need to make. Thank you for taking the time to read and comment. Big hug.
After a decade trapped by distractions, I'm pursuing my passion once again. I come from a military background...a Navy brat...and my father (now deceased) and brother, are both published writers...so .. more..