I WOULD...IF I COULD

A poem...who knew?

I would trail my words,

   Like gentle fingertips,

Along the flesh of your mind.

Feeling the shiver,

  Hearing the moan.

So intoxicatingly sublime.

 

I would taste your response,

   Like pearls on the tongue,

Rich beyond simple imagining.

Trembling with ardor,

   Gasping with need,

Every cell compelled to sing.

 

I would burn your soul,

   Living fire from within,

That sears you to your core.

Scorching inhibitions away,

   Melting reason and rhyme,

Bringing you ever back, for more.

I would...if I could...

 

Author's Note

Whether it's about physical union...or the meshing of minds...there is something incredibly intoxicating when like spirits connect.

Reviews

[Tony Jordan]

This speaks of love on a whole other plane. (Not the mile-high knee-trembler in United Airlines toilet type of plane) .; p
The type of joining that is beyond the physical. Pure energies merging and being way more than the sum of them. Such a love - such a 'meeting' is forever burned into the psyche... regardless of whether any physical conjoining occurs.
This is brilliant ReedWrite

[ReedWrite]

Thank you, Tony.
Yes...not a lot of reviewers picked up on that...this wasn't written as a reference to a physical union...but to something more. Something deeper and richer. Something that brands the soul. When all is said and done, if we're talking love, the physical joining of two people should be an expression of that kind of love...then again, I'm a hopeless romantic...lol.
Thank you for reading and commenting, Tony.

[Kathy Van Kurin]

'I WOULD... IF A COULD'
This reminds me of the inneer person, where the soul's true meaning and being dwell. How well do people really know one another? Oh but we do desire to know another, to be transparent. It's quite a gamble to be someone who reveals themselves. You have intelligently woven this desire within a poem which speaks to the love-hope within us.
Beautiful one!
Blessings,
Kathy

[Ghost]

Yes there is an intoxication about two people who bond so close that they read each other and can feel one another's pains and thoughts.. This was a truly deep poem.. Thank you for sharing

[ReedWrite]

Thank you for your review. Appreciate it.

[tanmay7551]

Imagination at the peak and for sure intoxicated spirits when they find each other replica of their own.

I would burn your soul,
Living fire from within,
That sears you to your core.

Interesting choice of words and expression. Very well written!

[ReedWrite]

Thank you very much, Tanmay!
Appreciate that you took time to read and comment, and glad you enjoyed the piece.

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Intoxicating imagery! Sublime words. Cheers Starz

[ReedWrite]

Appreciate that very much, Starzy! Thank you for the read and review.

[Papaya]

This is so good!
Nice work RW!

[ReedWrite]

Thank you Papaya! Appreciate your visit.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

This is an amazing read! That second stanza is breathtaking. I enjoyed reading it☺

[ReedWrite]

Thank you Yumna! Your words brought a smile to my face. So glad you enjoyed it.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I am glad I was the reason for your smile. The pleasure was mine ☺

[Ted Kniffen]

Well done, ReedWrite. It's a well known fact that the mind is the most active sex organ and the body the largest erogenous zone and your poem adroitly combined both. Good write

[ReedWrite]

Thank you, Ted. Appreciate your words. Thanks for the read and review.

[PhoenixDown]

Because -- perhaps -- it is all over those things connecting at once?

Regardless, this is a very respectable piece. I am a fan of your work. Great flow & pace. You were able to pick it up after you halted it. Great rhyming. Great descriptions & meshing. Great imagery. Great concept.
You are a very well-rounded writer. I look forward to more.

Phoenix

[ReedWrite]

Thank you Phoenix. I appreciate your comments very much. Thank you so much for the read and review.

[Sad Poet]

Great poem! The sensory details were amazing.

[ReedWrite]

Thank you so much. Appreciate the read and review.