THERE'S NO I IN WE

Is any needed?

There’s no I in We,

     No myself and me,

         No divergence or in-di-vid-u-al-i-ty.

There’s no Mine in Us

     No acumen, and no plus,

          No incompatible ideas left to dis-cuss.

 

Melded as one…a life sentence begun,

Disharmony dare not flourish here.

The battle is won…the war conveniently done,

The terms of surrender, all too clear.

 

There’s no I in We,

     No acrimonious cry or plea,

         No reasons left now for us to dis-a-gree.

There’s no Yours and Mine,

     No sandy, uncrossable line,

          No use fighting the judgment of the Di-vine.

 

Why didn’t I know…love shudders, then grows?

It’s no crime to question the subversity.

Highs can’t balance the lows…too many ebbs and flows.

And no mercy for those who won't bend the knee.

 

There’s no I in We,

     No myself and me,

        No hope fighting that in-ev-i-ta-bil-i-ty?

Author's Note

I'm not nearly as dark as my poetry might suggest...just thoughtful...questioning...wondering. I AM however, more than a little cynical. Who knew, right?

Reviews

[Kathy Van Kurin]

"THERE'S NO i IN WE"
ReedWrite,
How else can any of us learn. If all we know is ourselves with no challenges we simply go stagnant. Giving, sharing, caring and more besides is needed to become a well rounded human being. No where will any of us be tested more then in close knit relationships, where vulnerabiltiy is apparent. Great poem!
Blessings,
Kathy

[ReedWrite]

Thank you for the review, Kathy...appreciate it very much.

[Kathy Van Kurin]

Your very welcome. Keep enjoying your writing and sharing. Blessings to ya!

[genocide]

yep this is a good poem but I don't know what it's trying to convey

[ReedWrite]

LOL...no worries, genocide.
I have no clue what I'm trying to say either.
Thank you for the review.

[genocide]

hey reed write can you please read and review genocide vs mercy part one and two

[Gee]

Unless it is of the Nintendo variety. Evening ma'am

[ReedWrite]

Evening, Gee. I can always count on you for a chuckle...thanks for stopping by!

[Einstein Noodle]

wouldn't it be nice if it were so simple ...add dashes or two of mutual respect and i'm all in ;) i read in one of your responses this is written as a song and that was the feel i got right off ...selfishness can be an ugly blight on ones soul in relationships but one does need their individuality and "space" .. even in deepest love .. your poem inspires all kinds of thought and honest introspection ... ahhhhhhhhh love ... it makes and breaks don't it!? ;}
E.

[ReedWrite]

You are so right, E. Love makes and breaks...and we still go back for more, of course! Thanks for the read and comment, my friend.

[Einstein Noodle]

well...i always have anyway ...just a fool in love eh!? but at my age now i'm happy no matter :)))) some things besides wine do get better with age ;)

[ReedWrite]

LOL...You're priceless, E. You always make me smile! Big hug, my friend.

[Einstein Noodle]

aw same to you ma'am ..same to you! :))

[Sasquatch]

It's funny,,,how the past reflects in the present,,and the future of us all,,,mirrors,,,
inspiring insights into the soul

[ReedWrite]

Yes, I agree.
Thank you for reading and commenting, Sas. Big hug and kiss to you. :)

[barleygirl]

You have perfectly described the reason I never got married. I never wanted to meld into a blended pair & surrender my individuality. Nice rhyming, altho I'm not sure I would've used the dashes to emphasize rhyming words (it comes across strong without dashes). I also can relate to how people seemed to be judgmental about those "who won't bend the knee." Many astute observations, altho my memories are from a completely different era -- sorry to hear it still can sometimes feel this way to choose the independent life.

[ReedWrite]

Thank you so much for reading and commenting, BarleyGirl! Yes, I debated leaving the dashes in...they are there because this was originally written as a song, and the dashes are like a staccato marking (at least as a reminder for me when I sing it...lol). I'm not sure it's choosing the independent life, and finding someone who is comfortable enough with and in themselves, to allow you to be who you are, without feeling threatened. Without the need to control. Thanks again for the thumbs up! :)

[Tony Jordan]

If they get hit, you feel it and vice versa. If they feel joy you feel joy because of the joy they feel.
If love doesn't feel this way then it's lacking that main ingredient - the 'me and you versus the world' ingredient.
It doesn't mean we have to forfeit being who we are.
This is a real reference poem for lovers Pam.
Well penned.
:)

[ReedWrite]

Thank you, Tony.
God knows, I'm no expert on love...lol.
I appreciate your insightful comment. Big hug.

[Tony Jordan]

We all wear the lovers 'L' plate until our demise Pam but some people have more of an inkling (that's you by the way...curtsy bow...okay, okay...off my stage lol)

You're always weclcome (hugs)

[Carolynn]

I really enjoyed the flow of this and the topic is one I have written about myself. I love your line "love shudders then grows" this is so true - wonderful line and a well written poem :)

[ReedWrite]

Thank you very much Carolynn.
Glad you enjoyed it.

[Adam Adams]

i love when you call yourself "being-cynical". i guess, its not just only you but we're all being cynical around the world, perhaps... sometimes, some of us ignore what's already adapted by us: love-edge, resulting, we cause pain to oneself, unknowingly. certainly, there's no "i" or "me" or "mine" in love... but when it comes to "individuality", i guess, we're all being selfish... and for what? -- for nothing! very captivating, catchy and certainly a very cynical verse of your heart you licked in. must consider this one of my fav.! great work here.

[ReedWrite]

Thank you, Adam. I'm very glad you enjoyed this so much.
That is a great compliment to any writer.
And yes...I have a very active and healthy cynical side.
Again, thank you for this great review.

[Terry O'Leary]

An interesting dissection of human relationships... and a intriguing poem!
Well done!!!
Terry

[ReedWrite]

Thank you, Terry. Appreciate you taking time to read and comment.