"You don't Know Me"
ReedWrite,
Third stanza gave the full thread of inner working of the human soul. We can only respond to one another from a outer persona:
"You nod at my words,
Empty as they are...acknowledging the veneer; never the scars."
We are a complex and wonderful bundle changing an in process. With many layers. I guess it depends on what we allow viewed of ourselves and how long we are acquainted with any one person.
"You see the facade,
It's what I allow...but that's never been me, and isn't me now."
"You don't Know Me"
ReedWrite,
Third stanza gave the full thread of inner working of the human soul. We can only respond to one another from a outer persona:
"You nod at my words,
Empty as they are...acknowledging the veneer; never the scars."
We are a complex and wonderful bundle changing an in process. With many layers. I guess it depends on what we allow viewed of ourselves and how long we are acquainted with any one person.
"You see the facade,
It's what I allow...but that's never been me, and isn't me now."
I think we humans are so good at wearing masks, in deceiving others that we often deceive ourselves in what we truly are or rather forget our trueselves.. This was thought provoking! I loved reading this! Nicely penned ☺
The real 'us' is a precious commodity in some people's eyes and with that in mind it is emcumbent upon us to only let those we fully trust close enough to see. And then again - they are the ones who often do the deepest damage. Does anyone ever truly get to know someone - how many times does life tell us No! Tales of the wife and the secret cross-dressing husband, the mom and her drug-taking son, the friend and their friend who back-stabs them at every opportunity.
It's a dog eat real persona of other dog world out there.
Good writing RW.
Posted 7 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
So true, Tony. I'm not sure we ever really know anyone. We know what they allow us to see...we form .. read moreSo true, Tony. I'm not sure we ever really know anyone. We know what they allow us to see...we form opinions based on our personal perceptions. We see what we want to see...and often overlook the facts. Thank you for reading and commenting. Appreciate it.
Yes its a two way street.
Thank you RW for always being such a friend.
Happy New Year... read moreYes its a two way street.
Thank you RW for always being such a friend.
Happy New Year.
Hope to see more of you next year - well not more of YOU per se...ooh this is getting awkward ...
*runs away with red face*
mwah ...
7 Years Ago
LOL..welllll, Tony. A bit of flush looks good on you, my friend. Makes me wonder what other things m.. read moreLOL..welllll, Tony. A bit of flush looks good on you, my friend. Makes me wonder what other things might bring that blush to your cheeks. Innocent smile--> :)
7 Years Ago
Lots of things
Like, like sunburn and netflix and chilling...hahah
;p
This face in the mirror, how it mocks the world, for it is not the reflection of what is within, only a glimpse of the shell. You speak this with such vibrant depth, letting us know that all we can behold is what you unveil to us. Stirring, poignant poem.
Posted 7 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
Thank you C!
You read poetry the way you write it...stepping into every word, feeling it, liv.. read moreThank you C!
You read poetry the way you write it...stepping into every word, feeling it, living it, internalizing it. Thank you so much for your beautiful comment, and for taking time to read and review. Hug.
7 Years Ago
Words are a most extravagant escape from life's cold winds, so it's my pleasure. :)
sometimes, it's really nev'r true what we see through eyes, & feels through the vibrancy of bare heart. very deep verse you've come up with. captivating, for sure!
Thank you very much, Adam.
I appreciate that you took time to read and comment.
8 Years Ago
i always "take" time for... those who oft. (oh i mean... OFTEN.. xoxo) dance up & down upon and acro.. read morei always "take" time for... those who oft. (oh i mean... OFTEN.. xoxo) dance up & down upon and across an every furrowed string of my caramelized heart. ouch! xoxo
We all need that veneer at times, to protect us from the games that other people play with our emotions. Sometimes, we need to cut people out of our lives that are unhealthy for us. It can be painful, but required. Other times, we simply know that they will never truly know or see the real us, until they stop hiding behind their own mask first, or stop long enough to actually see the person we are beneath.
Wonderfully captured.
Yes...you got it. You can waste a lot of time being what someone else tells you you're supposed to b.. read moreYes...you got it. You can waste a lot of time being what someone else tells you you're supposed to be...because they believe you're not okay being you. I've learned the hard way that some people will never accept you the way you are...for who you are...and no mask in the world will ever change that or make it right. You have to be true to you....accept that you are the person God meant you to be...and walk away from those who refuse to see the beauty in that creation. Thank you for reading and reviewing, Nemo...you always share thoughts that leave me smiling. :)
8 Years Ago
Hopefully this made sense...lol. I am falling asleep at the computer. Bedtime for me I think. :)
8 Years Ago
You're very welcome. Feel sorry for the haters, never hate them. :)
i feel the sadness ...the loneliness ... even depression ...all the products of vain attempts to "hide" .. the irony of it all being the other side ... those looking in .. or not .. and making all those first impressions that can chain a relationship forever .. it can be like the trembling huddle of bats roosting ...in a small place .. blind and afraid yet needing the touch ... i like the way you arranged the couplets ..short long short long .. the quatrain emphasizes itself simply be being different ;)
E.
Posted 8 Years Ago
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8 Years Ago
Thank you, Einstein. I try to follow the rules of poetry, to some degree, but I also feel the emotio.. read moreThank you, Einstein. I try to follow the rules of poetry, to some degree, but I also feel the emotion needs to be expressed in the visual aspect of a poem, as well as the word choices...so I experiment with ideas. I also got my start in poetry writing, from crafting songs...so sometimes that hold-over intrudes. :)
Lovely form. We're pretty good at that aren't we...our common deception. Exhausting keeping that up though. It's a survival thing a coping thing a protection thing. We all have our reasons, and we all play the part. Never a good idea to stay there too long, you end up losing yourself. Like this a lot. R xo
Posted 8 Years Ago
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8 Years Ago
Hugs you tight. Thank you! Yes...Many days I feel this is me, even now. Since my divorce, I've tried.. read moreHugs you tight. Thank you! Yes...Many days I feel this is me, even now. Since my divorce, I've tried to find the ME I kept hidden for so long...may never chance another relationship, but if I do, that person will have to know who I am behind that mask, and be okay with it. I think a lot of people find themselves in that situation. You are right. It is a survival, coping, protection thing. Thanks for the read and comment!
The complex human being smiling at the world.
Someone once told me, no one smiles that much.
We all wear that mask to get us through the day, or even through our life.
But i suppose if it does the job, then that's fine.
And if that fails. I always play the Stones, Wild Horses.
A lot of depth to your poems, Like that.
Posted 8 Years Ago
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8 Years Ago
Thank you, Paul. I appreciate the read and review...and I love the Stones, too, lol.
After a decade trapped by distractions, I'm pursuing my passion once again. I come from a military background...a Navy brat...and my father (now deceased) and brother, are both published writers...so .. more..