Inevitably Blinded

This is a poem to make people challenge the way they think. I personally have a lot going on in my head with the difficulties of psychosis; It makes me quite a deep thinker.

Inevitability is debatable
An ultimatum, unrelateable?
Not to me, my mind is broad
As to the questions, we put forward

See, as a race, we suffer greatly
For intelligence makes many hate thee
Well; i like to think about the planet
In lights less obvious; goddammit

What's wrong with contemplating 
In a world that's dehydrating
As to the abundance of ability
To looks through other's eyes so critically

I know my sylabols don't match
And the structure as a whole; it lacks
It's obvious to see, in fact
It's the words that decipher my tact. 

In writing, I'm finding, my answers
Are still hiding, denying, and biding
They're time, until the right thing
Arises, and surprises my needs
That they're depriving, still hiding
I'm biding my time, this time; I'm smiling.

Author's Note

This was pretty much from the heart at a tough time for me. I like to challenge the idea that sylabolically, a poem should be consistent. I feel a change of pace reflects progression throughout the ways in which I was feeling. I'd appreciate some comments in that department. Thank you

Reviews

[Sam Gregory]

Well, this is good, you expressed urself well and the message is there. Not sure how to word what else I want to say. I do like the flow of it and the structure, the syllables are matched well if that makes sense. I rap so I know the importance of syllable counting, although I think in poetry its less important than in rap or songs unless they too flow to a beat. Anyway yeah, your vocabulary is good throughout too, I especially like how u used the word "thee", at first I thought it was a forced rhyme but I'll let that pass since its an awesome word and works. Not sure what else to say now. Keep it up :)

[Rob Lefevre]

Thank you ^^ and don't worry, I can see why you'd think that. I do however, read an awful lot of Shakespeare, sort of rubs off on you after a while :L

[Sam Gregory]

haha I got sick of shakespeare in school tbh. I don't really read any poetry by famous poets or read shakespearish sort of texts. I mainly listen to rap(the poetic kind) when am not writing my own stuff

[Rob Lefevre]

Yeah so did I :L but when I got a Shakespeare extract in my exam I had to start looking at it properly lol. I took literature at gcse and language at a level

[Sam Gregory]

I failed my english exams at gcse lol but am still doin it at A level haha