Singing The Primitive Beauty

In the blooming summer,

Facilitated by the broiling sun,

I looked up to the clear sky,

Who murmured its chants.

Orating about its ventures,

It turned me to the ground.

Towards the lush green nature,

Stretching beyond my sight.

Sneaking behind those monstrous trees,

I played hide and seek with nature.

Who tried to capture me,

With its whimsical spirits.

The waters sang me a humble lay,

And I listened, quiet and still.

After juggling with my patience,

I sang with them aloud.

Till the hulking mountains,

Echoed back my utterance.

And hummed the melody,

Passing its reaches to the nightingale.

Who sang in a lyrical flow,

While the butterflies vocalised.

Messaging past those weak leaves,

Who duplicated the aria.

Then we all sang, together and forever,

Till the moon rose above the trees.

Author's Note

I wrote this poem last night. I need some reviews on this poem to make it better.

Reviews

[Jordan's Back]

This is very mystical and enchanting, I loved the rhythm and the flow, it made the journey so Wonderful. I see nothing wrong with this piece. Excellent work

[Coyote Song]

A very beautiful and enchanting poem celebrating nature and your part in enjoying it. The images are very vivid and delightful. You describe a place that most anyone would want to go and enjoy all the natural beauty it has to offer. Very creative and enjoyable poem.

[rnuff]

a light wonderful read.

[Craba]

interesting read, i enjoyed this. It captivated me

[B-poet]

This is a very interesting a sensual poem. Nature seems to be the encompassing primitive beauty with a whole lot of sweet things to say. Great write. :)

[Bewitching Sensations]

lovely poem.. light hearted and enjoyable

[Steven Cash]

I want strawberries now and Idk why

Nice poem

[David Scott]

Very nice! The first two lines got me interested. Sounded like the beginning of an epic. I like how you drifted off into fantasy and let the reader know by using butterflies that actually vocalize. I often wondered what song a butterfly would sing...
Great poem.

[Cerise]

oh my gosh..its wonderful..its lyk you actually lived through it..a great piece very well done...the way you have tried to incorporate each and every part of nature is phenomenal..carry on

[Horizon K.]

Very pretty. You really captured the essence of nature's beauty.