'Till death do us apart

'Till death do us apart

A Chapter by -Alice Rose

I kept on adjusting the action that just occurred over and over. I just couldn't believe it. 2 feet away from me, my best friend's guts and blood were spread all over the floor. I had a feeling of sadness and anger. He just killed my best friend. Not a single warning was given before it happened. It just happened.
I walked over to her body and a whole other rush of anger passed over me. It wasn't Hanna. It was Melissa.
So where in the world was Hanna?
I felt her grab my shoulder.
"Hanna, are you okay?" I asked her. I started to feel around for cuts or bruises. Nothing.
"Yeah, Meg, I'm fine, jeez. Pipe down." she said. Was she serious right now?
"Hanna, how do you expect me to just calm down? I thought that body over there was you." I was even more agitated.
"No, I didn't mean it like that. I just don't want you to let this place get to you, is all." She said. Great, now I felt bad.
"Are you guys finished yet?" I heard the voice asked. Before we could answer, a table started to lower from the ceiling.
When it finally landed, I could make out the things that were on the table.
It was filled with knives, guns, and many explosives.
Oh my god.
Along with the weapons were two, shiny black glass bottles.



© 2013 -Alice Rose


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Check your spelling and grammar. You also ought to expand on this more - at present there is essentially no meaningful content here, and there's nothing that allows the audience to relate to the characters. I would talk more about how the characters feel and what they're thinking instead of just jumping straight to the action. Also, take care to avoid passivity.

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Check your spelling and grammar. You also ought to expand on this more - at present there is essentially no meaningful content here, and there's nothing that allows the audience to relate to the characters. I would talk more about how the characters feel and what they're thinking instead of just jumping straight to the action. Also, take care to avoid passivity.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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