portrait of a woman sleeping

your naked flesh glows in the light

            of a 60 watt incandescent bulb. 

you radiate waves of searing heat

            while lying wrapped in tangled sheets. 

your skin

so smooth,

like egg shell curves; 

dark tresses curled 

like van gogh swirls

and a faint smile

            pirouetting

on lips of pink, silk ballet shoes

as you dream of times when not in sleep.

Reviews

[MissWordSmith]

very nice. lovely and touching. i could see you lying there next to her with yourself propped up on one arm, thinking all this. a truly great write~~!!

[Samuel Dickens]

A lovely, artistic vision, nicely-worded. "Egg shell curves"--I like that.

[Coyote Poetry]

Poem is outstanding. Every line was strong and had purpose. I like the description of the room and the woman. I like your style of writing. Re-mind me of the old writers who demanded every word to have a reason to be used. A outanding poem.
Coyote

[Libby McKeown]

I stand in awe. I could not have said it better. Thanks for painting this into words.

[Annette Jay Sweeney]

This is a very interesting piece. I have to say my favorite part is "dark tresses curled/like Van Gogh swirls". I'm a huge Van Gogh fan, so I find that very intriguing. It's also very strong because it is an image almost anyone would understand. You make very good comparisons for the various parts of the woman.

I really enjoy poetry about this simple moments. It's nice to bring beauty into the plain. Good job!