White Rooms

White Rooms

A Poem by Crimson Apples

Chains snicker
As vultures bicker
Yet I'm still alive,
waiting for death to arrive,
it'd be too simple,
so instead life will cripple
what's viewed as insane.
Why can't you see?
It is only in pain,
Why won't you just leave it be?
They cry for my sake,
But I know they are fake.
I'm a chance for them so,
they can play "hero"
I am not a human, 
I am an "it,"
I am either "justice," 
or just another hit.
Alone, here in my cage
With nothing but my rage.
My shadow, the only darkness,
from light, that tore me,
from white that wore me
Till I was skin and bones, 
and shadow consumed me.

© 2018 Crimson Apples


Author's Note

Crimson Apples
It may be hard to dismantle. On another note, does anyone else, ALWAYS get the captcha they've entered wrong? That drives me crazy. Flipping onium. It's not my fault you look like onion.

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Somehow, it made me think of exactly what kind of 'it' this is. It could be anything. Truly, the human heart is an endless pit of complex emotions. Your craft her had drawn that thought well. 'It' could be a lot of things. Quite ambiguous. You really did great! :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


From the title and then the start to the last stanza, interesting. Well done.


Posted 8 Years Ago


Very entangled with torment and pain as if being chastised or tortured from either within or from out! How terrifying to feel this way!! I can certainly identify with these feelings! Speaking from my own demons!!! Very nice Crims!!!!

Posted 8 Years Ago


Crimson Apples

8 Years Ago

Thank you!!!
Your comment just broke my heart with it's sweetness.
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Gee
Love rhyming verse,very much liked this.You have an unusual but very pleasing style

Posted 8 Years Ago


Crimson Apples

8 Years Ago

Thank you =)
Your profile picture is adorable by the way. I have a King Charles Spaniel. SHEE.. read more
Gee

8 Years Ago

You're most welcome.......Jake,10 year old cocker,a beautiful animal,although he thinks he is a huma.. read more
Crimson Apples

8 Years Ago

I'm pretty sure all pets think they are xD
Hello crimson !:-)
this is my first visit to your profile and i love it !!
Poetry is really emotional with such a smooth flow keep writing

Posted 8 Years Ago


Crimson Apples

8 Years Ago

Thank you =)
I'm happy you've enjoyed your visit!
zunie frost

8 Years Ago

Yup i did !! Have a nice day
Crimson Apples

8 Years Ago

Thank you =)
I hope you do too!
Catchpas are horrifying, and don't work for stopping programs most of the time anyway.

Love the fourth stanza, especially the beginning. I'm currently working on a story to explain the difference between 'he' and 'it', so I understood this to be a deeper description of the character. Anywau, good luck, and great post. Keep writing, it can only get better.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Crimson Apples

8 Years Ago

I'll get all pumped about posting something online, then repeatedly get the captcha wrong. >=(
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From the title and then the start, I thought i would be someone in a padded cell. Then when I got to the last stanza, I wondered if perchance I could be correct. I don't think so, but interesting. Well done.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Crimson Apples

8 Years Ago

No, that's what I imagined while writing this. Thank you for the review!
I love rhyming poems! So catchy and fun, almost like a trick on your mind to figure out.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Crimson Apples

8 Years Ago

My favourite teacher, started off his introduction with a "what the f**k?" after tripping on his way.. read more
Sympathy Heart

8 Years Ago

first day of intro to radiography: shown xrays of random objects up patients bums.
Crimson Apples

8 Years Ago

lololol XD
Very well worded and structured, I had fun dismantling it. The fourth stanza was most impressive!

Posted 8 Years Ago


Crimson Apples

8 Years Ago

Thanks, I'm glad you enjoyed =)
I really don't understand much about poetry, but this one seemed to make a lot of sense to me.
Sorry I'm not all that constructive TT^TT

Posted 8 Years Ago


Crimson Apples

8 Years Ago

Thank you for reviewing! I found that very constructive, and it makes me happy you read this =) I'm .. read more

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Added on December 27, 2015
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