It may be hard to dismantle. On another note, does anyone else, ALWAYS get the captcha they've entered wrong? That drives me crazy. Flipping onium. It's not my fault you look like onion.
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Somehow, it made me think of exactly what kind of 'it' this is. It could be anything. Truly, the human heart is an endless pit of complex emotions. Your craft her had drawn that thought well. 'It' could be a lot of things. Quite ambiguous. You really did great! :)
Very entangled with torment and pain as if being chastised or tortured from either within or from out! How terrifying to feel this way!! I can certainly identify with these feelings! Speaking from my own demons!!! Very nice Crims!!!!
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
Thank you!!!
Your comment just broke my heart with it's sweetness.
Thank you =)
Your profile picture is adorable by the way. I have a King Charles Spaniel. SHEE.. read moreThank you =)
Your profile picture is adorable by the way. I have a King Charles Spaniel. SHEEEE'S A SWEEETHEAAAAART.
8 Years Ago
You're most welcome.......Jake,10 year old cocker,a beautiful animal,although he thinks he is a huma.. read moreYou're most welcome.......Jake,10 year old cocker,a beautiful animal,although he thinks he is a human !!
Catchpas are horrifying, and don't work for stopping programs most of the time anyway.
Love the fourth stanza, especially the beginning. I'm currently working on a story to explain the difference between 'he' and 'it', so I understood this to be a deeper description of the character. Anywau, good luck, and great post. Keep writing, it can only get better.
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
I'll get all pumped about posting something online, then repeatedly get the captcha wrong. >=( read moreI'll get all pumped about posting something online, then repeatedly get the captcha wrong. >=(
But thank you for the review, and I'm glad you got it. Or more importantly read, and liked it =D
From the title and then the start, I thought i would be someone in a padded cell. Then when I got to the last stanza, I wondered if perchance I could be correct. I don't think so, but interesting. Well done.
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
No, that's what I imagined while writing this. Thank you for the review!
I love rhyming poems! So catchy and fun, almost like a trick on your mind to figure out.
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
Yas! I have to reword a lot of what I want to say, or just change it entirely. Like art. I'll start .. read moreYas! I have to reword a lot of what I want to say, or just change it entirely. Like art. I'll start drawing a princess, but it turns into some fire breathing dragon thing. But as long as it doesn't suck...
8 Years Ago
Thanks for the review =)
8 Years Ago
When I write I try to make it serious, but then it just ends up being humerus (x-ray tech humor for .. read moreWhen I write I try to make it serious, but then it just ends up being humerus (x-ray tech humor for ya ;) ). Every time.
8 Years Ago
lol. I can never stay on topic when writing persuasive essays for school. Iz s**t xD
8 Years Ago
after having a radiology instructor who wanted papers done in her class and pointless reports, when .. read moreafter having a radiology instructor who wanted papers done in her class and pointless reports, when I was in my class last semester one of my classmates asked if we were going to have to do reports for that instructor and he responded with "Oh, hell no". Needless to say I liked him.
My favourite teacher, started off his introduction with a "what the f**k?" after tripping on his way.. read moreMy favourite teacher, started off his introduction with a "what the f**k?" after tripping on his way in.
8 Years Ago
first day of intro to radiography: shown xrays of random objects up patients bums.
I really don't understand much about poetry, but this one seemed to make a lot of sense to me.
Sorry I'm not all that constructive TT^TT
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
Thank you for reviewing! I found that very constructive, and it makes me happy you read this =) I'm .. read moreThank you for reviewing! I found that very constructive, and it makes me happy you read this =) I'm glad it makes sense to you.