An unwelcome attack

An unwelcome attack

A Story by Beck Louise
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Quite a brutal story and not for the easily offended.

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I hadn't seen it coming. How could I have been so stupid? I should have been looking out.The street was dark and deserted, a creepy place, the kind of place I usually avoid. I had no choice, I was lost. Before I had even realised there was anyone there I had been shoved brutally against the cold hard wall. Unable to move from the grip of this unknown attacker, I squirmed feebly, screaming and crying out for anyone who could hear, knowing in my heart, no one was coming. I felt a cold blade press to my throat.
"Shut up! You scream once more and I'll slit your throat!" He spat harshly
"Please" I groaned pathetically
"Shut up! I'm not f*****g kidding!" I bit my lip, stifling any sound trying to pass. I wished then that he would just take my money and leave. I wasn't going to try and stop him. 
He reached then, but when I realised he wasn't reaching for my purse, I cried out once more. He grabbed a chunk of my hair, slamming my face hard against the wall and I soon felt the trickle of my own blood, cascading down my face. I felt him yank my skirt up savagely. He began to breathe heavier now, and I felt powerfully nauseous listening to his sick enjoyment. I felt my head leaving my body, as if I was looking down on the scene. In my head I was screaming, yelling in distress and protest, but I was horribly powerless. He was grunting in my ear now, grunting in his twisted pleasure. I felt like I had no control over my own body, like even though I was trying so hard to protest, I couldn't move at all. Everything kind of disappeared for a while as I blacked out. I was brought back down to earth as he threw me to the ground, but he wasn't finished yet. He knelt down next to me, his face hovering above my own.
"You ever tell anyone, I will find you. The next time you won't be so lucky" He stood up once more, throwing his foot hard into my stomach a couple of times, laughing as I writhed in pain. He threw one final kick into my ribs before leaving. I was paralysed. I could only lie there on the cold wet ground, my whole body shaking. 

© 2012 Beck Louise


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This is amazing... thank you for writing it, it was an enjoyment to read.

Posted 12 Years Ago


This was horrible to read about, but you wrote it very well. It was very intense and descriptive, yet as quixotic_rose said you didn't overdo. By not saying too much, I think you give the piece dignity. Actually, it was so vivid that I found myself feeling very uncomfortable and jittery wanting to look away, but I couldn't. You did a great job and for that reason it will get across the warning, the pain, the questions that reading it brings.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Definitely a brutal write, I would think it would be difficult to write something like this as well as you have. You have great talent in description, you give just enough to understand what kind of attack he is giving, but you don't over do it. wonderful write for such a grim topic.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Beck Louise

12 Years Ago

Yes, it was very difficult to write. A really hard topic to write, hope I did it justice. Thank you .. read more
quixotic_rose

12 Years Ago

You definitely did it justice. your welcome :)
Wow! Packed to the brim, very well written, fast paced, and all together excellent!

Posted 12 Years Ago


Beck Louise

12 Years Ago

Thank you so much! :)
Damn that's a crazy story. Its ashamed that this happens all around the world. I had friends attacked like this. This was to read but its real. Real things happens like this and its hard to defend ourselves when it randomly happens

Posted 12 Years Ago


Beck Louise

12 Years Ago

Yeah, it's pretty crazy. I was kind of deciding on putting it up or not in case it was too much tbh
Well.. this..um.. this hit too close to home for me to comment without being biased. Well writen, just too much for me. Sorry

Posted 12 Years Ago


Beck Louise

12 Years Ago

Oh thats okay then :) this is a very personal piece obviously i hoped no one would be able to relate.. read more
That_Girl

12 Years Ago

lol no problem! It was good though, honest. :)
Beck Louise

12 Years Ago

Thank you i appreciate it!:)
A brutal story, yes, but very well written. Keep up the great work!

Posted 12 Years Ago


Beck Louise

12 Years Ago

Thank you!

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Beck Louise
Beck Louise

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I'm Beck. I'm a writer focusing on women's fictions, drama, and historical romance. I am active on this platform again as of March 2023, so please send any read requests and I will make sure I ge.. more..

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