Who is that woman?

Like I said poetry is not my strong point but this is very personal.

Who is that woman I see?

She stares ever blank 

She wanders always aimlessly 

Only looking, never seeing

I am but a shadow to her

a passing flash

a glimpse of her past

Only there, never moving

Who is this woman they taunt

She cries ever more

She wanders, never knowing

Always scorned, never belonging

They are but shadows to her

passing flashes 

remaining in her past

only there, never moving

Who is that woman you see?

the bravest one you know

showing not any weakness

only strong, never crying

You are a light to her

Giving her strength

The wings beneath her

always there, never leaving

Reviews

[quixotic_rose]

I really like this, it seems very deep and emotions, like your comment says, i can definitely tell this means something strong to you. I love the not quite repetition of the last lines in each stanza, they really just pull it together and give a final impact to each thought you throw out. really neat, I liked it :) (poetry isnt my strong point either but trying never hurts :)

[afra]

good work .....keep writing

[♥ Lexii Boo &hea..]

i really like this great write hope to see more thanks for sharing :P

[zainul]

Appears like a mysterious yet an ordinary woman who is always around.
Wonderful work.

[Owlgirl]

Emotional, poweful, ver well written! Smooth flow, nice use of vocabulary!

[Tiffy Yvonne]

deep

[BillyGirl]

This was really good. It feels really deep, and to me it could easily be a song.

[That_Girl]

I really like how the last lines in each stanza are very similar.. it adds a little something to the poem. :)