18 years

I'd write it down on paper

but my blood may stain the page

I'm still bitter towards you but

my depressing mind killed my rage

I need to let you know now

just how much you let me down

forcing your tactless words

on top of me as I drown

I asked for nothing but help

You turned on me in my hour of need

sided with the one who caused my demise

Thinking of yourself in fickle greed

My most fulfilling of addictions

helped me out when you refuse

feeding my euphoric escape

The chains of innocence cut loose

I fall to my inevitable end

drowning in blood and tears 

it all must come to an end now

a disasterous tragic 18 years

Reviews

[quarintine_deathangel]

I hate growing up XP Sorry for what you went through. You made a beautiful write of it though ;) The rhyming keeps a flow throughout the poem. Very nice poem. Thanx for writing^.^

[zainul]

This is a very lovely piece worth reciting time and again.
The choice of words,rhyming pattern,forceful expression have made it a model.
Congratulations!!!

[SmileBig :)]

There are NO words to describe how awesome this is, or how much I can relate! Love it so much! Raw talent right here and emotions shown in the best way! Very good job :)

[Trixolomanea]

The wording in this poem is simply amazing, you did a really good job here portraying venomous emotions. I loved it :)

[Crazy Cat Man]

I love this piece. ive been feeling a dark mood myself. very cathartic to read :)

[BillyGirl]

The first word "pI'd" confuzzled me a bit lol. Great read ;)

[Owlgirl]

Simply amazing.

[Theresa]

Great word choice to convey emotions. Especially like: "depressing mind killed my rage,
forcing your tactless words..., fickle greed, euphoric escape.
Well done!

[Olivia Marie]

Written beautifully

[that-little-green-monst..]

Packed with really strong emotions. An excellent job expressing the pain through this poem. I really like the lines, "Forcing your tactless words/ on top of me as I drown"