Dedicated Lovers

The dedicated lovers

 

I’m falling,

Falling….

Falling………

 

I try to reach for something,

Anything!

But I can’t hold on.

No one can save me.

But I need help.

 

I fear the fall to my death.

I know it’s going to hurt.

I start to cry…

 

What about all the people I’ll be leaving?

My friends?

My family?

And you……

 

I’ve failed you.

You told me you loved me,

And I do love you.

And when you told me to be careful……I failed.

I walked too much on the edge……

And I fell.

 

When I fell I heard you scream.

I never thought I would hear that…

Your scream keeps ringing in my head.

You are in such pain.

I can’t hear it anymore!

Then the voice switches.

Your calm smooth voice flows through my ears.

Telling me

“It’s ok,

Stay calm,

You’ll be fine,

I’m here for you”

 

I start to relax,

Hearing your voice is so sweet…

I close my eyes.

And try to feel the relaxing feeling of falling.

The wind passes through my hair,

And I feel weightless.

 

When will I hit the end?

It has seemed that so much time has passed.

I want to look but I can’t.

 

Then,

I think of you again….

I hear your voice yet another time.

 

“It’s ok.

I’m here….

And I always will be”

I open my eyes to see that you are here,

Falling with me,

I grab a hold of you,

And I begin to cry.

 

“Why would you do such a thing as to jump?” I asked

“I love you and I always will,

If you go,

I go” you say

In a soft steady tone.

 

Then I feel the end.

We’ve hit the bottom

And yet I don’t care.

 

Then I realize….

I’m fine…..

I can stand!

 

I look over to see your limp body,

Resting,

Peacefully….

A thought comes to my head.

 

“Oh my god!”

“Wake up!

Wake up damn you!

Stop messing with me!”

Then I realize….

You aren’t faking….

I scream

NOOOOOO!

 

Something jolts me awake.

I hear your scared voice.

“What’s the matter?! Are you ok?!

Angel!”

I open my eyes to see you,

And I burst into tears,

Grabbing you in my arms

And squeezing as hard as I could.

I will never let you go.

 

I can feel my voice start to tremble.

“I love you!

I love you with all my heart!

I promise to be careful!

I won’t go near the edge!”

 

You look at me in puzzlement.

“What are you talking about?”

I take a deep breath,

It was just a dream…

Just a dream…

But I don’t care.

“I love you”

Reviews

[Chickenmama]

I really like the intensity of the feeling, and that it's expressed vividly. However I feel that all this can be conveyed in a shorter form and with narration or description instead of dialog.