The unknown heart

A Story by Rea.kd

It's a short story about a girl who no one ever understood her... Hope u like it 😊

She's a happy person, she's like everyone else.. She like to play, to go out with her friends.. She likes the park where she can watch the stars and the moon with her loved ones.. Everyone clams to know her so much .. They say that she's the most boring person in the world and she don't live an adventure life.. BUT, no one knows about her dark soul, her bloody nights, her passion for killing people, her miserable life, NO one knows about her secret life .. The secret that she berried in the darkest part in her heart. Lets call her "Rea"..
Let me introduce her : She's 30 yo, tall, long brown hair, big brown eyes, white, she has a cute smile, small nose and a perfect body...
When you see Rea in the streets, your first impression would be: "wooow, she's so beautiful, she looks so happy, I envy her.."
Everyone loves her, she's nice to people, she helps everybody.. But that's not the real her..
She managed to change her self over the years, she moved from country to country so no one can recognise her..
•January the 5th 1986, location : Hawaii, 16 yo.
Rea and her family moved to Hawaii, everything was great, they were happy, until one day she was all by herself in the house when her boyfriend visited her.. He wasn't normal that day, he was drunk. He pushed her to the ground and tried to rape her, but she took a pair of scissors and stabbed him until he died. Her mom walked in and saw her daughter covered in blood and the young boy was dead. Rea run to her mom and explained what happened. She didn't want her daughter to go to jail, so they berried the body in the garden and cleaned everything. After one year of the cops searching for the boy, her parents got divorced and she moved with her mother.
• May the 22nd 1989 , location : NY , 19 yo
Rea lived 3 years peacefully in NY city, her mom died. She became rich thanks to her mothers fortune.
The time she lived in NY, she had her first best friend, her name was Emily.
Emily was a petite girl, she had a black hair, and a cute small face.
Emily knew everything about Rea even about her dead boyfriend, and she kept her secret until one day she told everything to her boyfriend. Rea was going to forgive her but Emily kept screaming at her and reminding her that she's a killer and her place was in jail.. Rea couldn't stop herself she took her gun and shoot them both. She stayed hours in front of their bodies staring at them . (3 KILLES)
• January the 1st 1991, location : Tokyo 21 yo
Rea moved to Tokyo to forget about what happened, two years has past she met a guy called Max they fall in love with each other, they lived in the same apartment, they were madly in love until she was shocked by the news that Max was the cop who was searching for her, but he didn't know what she looked like. She had to kill him but she loved him so much.
Rea took him to a room, told him everything to see how he'll react. Max was shocked, he didn't believe he's ears. He told her that he love her but his work was more important so he will arrest her.
Rea started crying, she pulled her gun and shoot him. Unfortunately a family heard the gun shot. She killed all the four members. Rea loved the look and smell of blood. ( 8 KILLES)
•september the 13th 1993, location : India 23 yo
Rea lived 2 years in india, she loved their culture, the way they live, she had lots of friends but the one she loved the most was Rajich her indian best friend, he was the sweetest person she ever met. He taught her his language, his way of thinking, his wisdom.
Rea had a bad luck chasing her every place she goes to. Rajich had a virus in his chest, he told her that he's feeling worst everyday
and that he will die. He requested something from her.. Rajich wanted Rea to kill him and relieve him from his misery. She couldn't do it but he insisted and begged her, finally, she took a knife and put his life at it ends. ( 9 KILLES )
•April the 29th 1994, location : Mexico 24 yo
Over one year in Mexico Rea killed 10 people, she become the pap of " Les gringos" the mafia who controls everything and everyone. She disliked the life their, everybody hates each others, she couldn't forget her real life. In Mexico the killers are the heroes, she couldn't stop killing or she's the one who will get killed. ( 19 KILLES )
•July the 5th 1997, location : Morocco 27 yo
3 years in Morocco. Rea was fascinated by their culture, their love and respect for their religion. She loved their generosity with guests even if they were from different religions. She lived in a big house with a moroccan family for 2 and a half year. They taught her everything they know. They taught her to see with her heart not with her eyes, she learned to control her feelings, Rea become more peaceful with herself than ever. She decided to stop killing people and live in Morocco for ever to make her own family. Unfortunately, the police had already gotten to her and brought her back to Hawaii.
•October the 14th 1999, location : Hawaii prison 29 yo
After 2 years in prison, Rea tried to control her anger. She survived all their suffering, their cursing. Even with the prisoners, she didn't talk to no one, she kept her life to her self, she didn't gave them time even when they teased her.
•January the 31st 2000 (her birthday), location : Hawaii prison 30 yo
Rea's third year in prison has come, she lost all her patience, she couldn't stay there any longer or she would get crazier. Rea planned for her escape for 10 months. When the day has arrived, she killed 10 prisoners and 8 policemen, she finally got out of that bloody prison. ( 37 KILLES ).
Rea wrote a suicide letter and send it to a news paper so the whole world can read it :
"For all the people out there , Rea will finally rest in peace. And for all the families that I made miserable I'm sorry, that's who I am and no one can change me or understand me, cause my heart is like a tunnel. The further you go into it, the darker it gets and the closest you get to death."
Until this day no one knows if Rea really died.

© 2016 Rea.kd

Author's Note

I need an honest opinion about this story, and how i can improve my writing !!!
PS: I named her Rea like me because it's the only name I thought about when I was writing it :)

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Bilance

Too many summarized scenes too little impact. You say that you like to write short stories don't you? This kind of plotline is obviously meant for a long story to say the least. You have too many scenes to leave any impression on the readers because all of them are vague to the point that it looks like the story is at a planning stage and these are simply the rough ideas of how the story should be instead of it actually being a story. One thing to note is that you must NEVER appear in the story and introduce your character to us it is like a director coming up to your tv screen and broke the fourth wall just to tell you who on earth the main character of the story is.

•January the 5th 1986, location : Hawaii, 16 yo.
Rea and her family moved to Hawaii, everything was great, they were happy, until one day she was all by herself in the house when her boyfriend visited her.. He wasn't normal that day, he was drunk. He pushed her to the ground and tried to rape her, but she took a pair of scissors and stabbed him until he died. Her mom walked in and saw her daughter covered in blood and the young boy was dead. Rea run to her mom and explained what happened. She didn't want her daughter to go to jail, so they berried the body in the garden and cleaned everything. After one year of the cops searching for the boy, her parents got divorced and she moved with her mother. This should be the only plot that you can have for now. I want you to take this scene, describe how it came to be and tell us exactly how everything happen to how strangely smelly Rea's boyfriend is because he reeks of alcohol and as the girlfriend how worried Rea is for him. To how Rae became desperate because he tried to rape her and when went through her mind after she killed her boyfriend. Do that and you can produce a decent short story.