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Reviews

[Ariel B.]

Ah, I love the way you've written
"I'm free!
and not" -
the structure, the way that "free!" is an exclamation and "not" is an afterthought - it's such a good visual illustration of these constrasts of emotion.

It's a funny feeling reading this, because I just moments ago posted a new poem about feeling alone in more pleasurable ways, and this is such a bitter counterpoint to mine. I hope you can fall in love with your loneliness and help it metamorphose into the serenity of solitude.

[Hayley]

I like this because anyone can relate in a different way.
A new start and there are so many possibilities and opportunities, but this speaker is alone.
It's funny. I really do feel this way, I just never thought about it much until reading this. I am going away and I am so ready to go to college and leave my home, but I will be alone...aiming for the rest of my life. I will be free, but I will have never felt so alone. Excellent work.

[Seshat Nidaba]

That's exactly how I feel! Though it took my utmost concentration to read this neat font!

[Kenneth The Poet]

Stunning, favorited.

[Nimbus Thread]

Nice...the dichotomy of freedom...so very true.

[Sweet_pale_cacophony]

There are two lines here which bring down the essence of what you set to convey here...
I am gathering myself..
I have never felt so alone.
Perhaps it is strange but when we are alone we are more in tune with ourselves and not trying to be what another wants us to be...
Your poems are something I could meditate on..:)

[Chris]

I pause here to reflect on things...
and to always wonder how fresh coffee
manages to get cold and dull.

Chris

[Marie Harrison]

I love the hand written poem too.
Beautiful. I hear they are not going
to be teaching cursive writing in
school anymore. I thought that
was crazy when I heard that.
What a shame it would be to
have a world without cursive
writing. It's beautiful!

[emmajoy]

sad, sad, sad .. like a spider feels when it's suddenly released from a web in an overgrown holly bush

[Melobldnfr]

Here I see a toddler who, though Mother may be near, is always quite alone in taking those first arbitrary steps. "Arbitary" in the sense that a toddler's first steps is often out of will rather than necessity. As the adult steps out (or into...) anew, such steps may be necessary and more toward a focused goal than random, but such steps still take will and cause us to warble no less. In said moments, regardless of who or what may be near, we feel alone because we alone can sense the direction of our destiny, the paths we must take, and make the necessary strides. Kudos to you in your expression of this!

[asdarkeyesclose]

I liked the sharp contrasts in this. For instance, freedom/captivity. This is a fresh, engaging poem. Very enjoyable :)