Worn

Worn

A Poem by Robin
"

Somewhere between here and there

"

 

She was at a coinflip crossroads

burning cheap gas on a daydream  

she was running to somewhere -

away.

she was seeing double and she had to pee

down to two cigarettes and she was dying for a beer  

it was 2 A.M.

she looked for a sign, a light , a falling star

just something to guide her . 

so she stopped -

and got out.

she had never felt a night so dark

the wind was fierce and she still had to go 

so she did it right there in the middle of the road   

and she laughed out loud with only God and the coyotes to hear.

and stood there with the wind messing her hair

and caught herself ...

hoping

for just a star , a sign , a light to guide her

and she went back to her worn-out car

and found a look-away quarter and turned to the east

a tear in her eye .  

it was all she could do

because all she had to do - 

was get through this night  

© 2011 Robin


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This poem makes me wonder what kind of hell she had walked through. The imagery is spot on and I love that she peed right in the middle of the road. People really do that so I love this poem for it capturing true human nature on its bleakest hour. I can't picture this woman running from something or someone. Great write.

Posted 13 Years Ago


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So descriptive and to the gut. I felt as though I was there watching her make that decision. The first line got to me immediately, can life really be reduced to a 'coin toss', I imagine when you're that desperate, it's the way it happens.

Posted 12 Years Ago


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she's beautiful and so frightening.... i wonder, does she want to be soothed and tamed? what a freedom this feels.... and a recklessness.. don't think i'll ever know..... just absolutely fantastic writing.

Posted 12 Years Ago


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Well this is just sublime prose!
It reads so,..damned well.

Thanks for sharing, Robin

Posted 12 Years Ago


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A woman from Boulder Colorado, if I had to guess.

It's very human Robin. And strangely American.

Posted 12 Years Ago


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I know here. I love your style, so reading you after you complimented me, I am humbled. This is the brutal edgy ugly rawness that I find real and screaming honest. I suspect though you have a wise old soul and see through eyes that know secrets of the universe.

Posted 13 Years Ago


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It's all any of us can do when taking such trips. In fact, a guiding star is just as apt to send you down the wrong road as none at all, so I've found.

Posted 13 Years Ago


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Tom petty meets flyleaf in a bar and makes a piano play to describe the style here. Other than that it describes an intoxication so deep it could be anything and not just on the alcahol. Reminds me of moments so lost to wonderous where I could talk to myself because of lonliness missing all of lifes completions. Though something still remains corely amazing in this, Sooooooooo real robin.

Posted 13 Years Ago


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peeing in the middle ofthe road...i'm wondering what iwould upon finding someone doing that...brilliant poet.

Posted 13 Years Ago


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a coinflip crossroads (thought provoking) - great way to shape and ignite intuition of what the reader can prepare for - she couldn't make up her mind and looked for something or a sign to guide her because she can't trust herself to decide so she numbs and walks subdued with indecisiveness weighing heavy - i've felt like this before - i enjoyed your tap into all the senses

Posted 13 Years Ago


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Liz
This really caught my imagination. Makes me wonder what she went through and what she will continue to go through on her journey. I really liked the line "and she laughed out loud with only God and the coyotes to hear." Really nice work :)

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