The Shattering

moments like this

 

it was just a moment 

 

like one of the thousand that blur by

 

as you go through the day

 

a little bird

 

a sparrow

 

resting on a concrete curb 

 

puffed feathers

 

feeling the sun

 

or maybe it was the dandelion

 

bent over the grass

 

in the summer wind

 

trying to keep wishes intact

 

when he turned

 

and looked into my eyes 

 

and that moment ...

 

 

 shattered

 

 

I could hear her voice

 

see her finger point

 

a smile on her face

 

in world some would call hell

 

and how that smile would last for the rest of the day

 

her whispering

 

 

" bird "

 

 

and all I wanted , was some french fries

Reviews

[roarke]

it's part of the melange of life. Lightening strikes all the time, we mostly don't notice it. When the emotions are raw, brought out and stretched, the "fine" mixes with the large and the hidden fissures spiderweb... we get a glimpse of the beauty of the design and how it all blends together. Some can see it, others understand it, a minority shatter, and then there is the special few that having communed with it, then choose to create with it..... Robin is one of those special few.

[Ms. Gruye]

to me birds have always signified the obvious. They just always are there, no? Flying about, chirping too loud, or struggling to survive right in front of us, or to live in spite of us. Here, I like the earnest way you plot out the bird and the other, the wafting cry for chips.

viva la

[JelliFyshKissUs]

A fragmented moment that means nothing for some, but meant everything to you. Your pieces are moving me beyond words lately, birdie. Beyond words.

[Bubo]

Oh my goodness Robin......what beautiful heart hurting write........to be so clearly reminded of someone, you use words so beautifully, and such insight.

[Angela H.]

I found this in the popular writing section and I see why. My favorite lines -

maybe it was the dandelion/bent over the grass/in the summer wind/trying to keep wishes intact

Like it!

[Lachenille Papillion]

It's in the nooks and crevices of life that one happens upon a heartbeat long since gone... Your depth here is palpable, Robin.

[Searching 4 Serenity]

How heart-wrenching it is that the simplest of things can shatter a person all over again, bringing back old memories.
I got a kick outta the last line.

[Kerry O'Connor]

a little bird
a robin...

So interesting to see this shattering moment from both perspectives.

[Brad]

damn, brother, that last line was so f'n perfect...you go from complex to simplicity in a matter of syllables

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

oh my sir~ yes indeedy~ those moments I think are meant to catch us off guard to test just how much surreality dipped in beauty outside perimeters of norm we can take before shattering away from everydays completely~ though encased inside this pearl the shattering seems alright~ =)~