Tomcat Moan

a collab with MuSe Ampoule

 

look at that cat ...

tearing 3 am out of my morning
          mourning rising dawn
          forsake dreams to wake the dead
          cursing night players
screaming mythos from my head
and I wondered
if that clock cared
3 clangs rang… and bang
a pillow full of grit
roman numerals underhand
three i's - capitalized
her story in Greek 

just wanted to sleep
          you know as well as I
          ...sleep is for the dead  
The sand man commeth
but not for my sad head
          leaves me lost
          clock staring mad
and that damned cat
too chicken to fight 

Full moon and arched backs  

cross-eyed pheromones  

that low feline moan   

and my window is open

          to suggestion -

          a brick… or that

          broken red stiletto     

          she left here long ago

 

red always looked good on her ... 

 

Author's Note

The result of a bit of late night fun with the ever imaginative MuSe Ampoule , hope you enjoy .

Image: http://www.notablebiographies.com/images/uewb_06_img0401.jpg (found after piece was written, thanks Musey ! )

Reviews

[MuSe Ampoule]

All I's got ta say is... you rock! You've turned me on to Kerouac and made a wonderful dance partner! You started the crazeetrain with the first two lines and working with you was near effortless!

Any time you want to leak your muse on me...feel free!

[David W Moore III]

Awesome. This was utterly fantastic. Brings back many memories and love the last stanza! Great job you two!

[Lilly Negoi]

ahhh, what a wonderful twist! :D from
"and that damned cat
too chicken to fight "
to
"a brick… or that
broken red stiletto
she left here long ago"

[Tommy]

The flow is awesome! The piece feels like one poet, you two blend really well; a tribute to both of your talents. I think you two could adapt to any one’s work, and bring it to another level. I have to admit, I hadn’t heard of Kerouac, but I looked him up and will have to read some of his work…The bits of rhyme and breaks make this piece feel sleek as the night…Tom cat prowling…

Great Write You Two!
RLG,
Tommy

[Sel Whiteley]

Wow, this is exquisite, the way you start with the cat waking the persona at 3am and only right at the end does the thought of the loved one enter. That's really resonant, of how those hours are the loneliest. The word play is exquisite. I loved that opening with morning, mourning and the verb tearing really shows the almost tangible action of the cat.Love the personification of the clock, foreshadowing for the woman, but still allowing it to be unexpected. A masterful, very well-structured poem.

[Jeff Loquist]

i'm always hesitant to read collaborations...i'm so glad i made an exception since your name was attached to it...

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

much enjoyed!~ great collab that bounces the perimeters of surreality grounded in layered facets~

[just rose.]

This is a wonderful collaboration!

[Ladysue]

oh what a great flow and such a fun piece to read...awesome collaboration..

[.]

this feels spontaneous and tight...the rhythm is smooth..very cool..indeed..

[Jūdan FyreHeart]

This was very nicely done. You guys work great together. =D