Grey Area

California koan

 

I walked along that concrete strip

 

and looked beyond the city lights

 

where I only found a sigh of a moon

 

it was then ...

 

I knew

 

that where I was

 

I would miss  

 

your song  

Reviews

[Jennifer Lenhardt]

ahh... it's like the wild beckons us from the city and the moon only sighs (loved that line). i always find though that i miss whatever happens to be missing. if i am in the city i will miss the forest and the mountains, but if i am in the mountains then eventually i will miss the busyness of the city, the buildings, and even the grayness of the concrete. somehow, i guess, i am a little bit of both or - a little bit of both is somehow a part of me.

loving these pieces of California Koan!

[roarke]

city-bad, forest-good..... lol. Man, for all his myopic technological accomplishments.... still doesn't get what life and nature are all about. I find those grey strips and blank steel and glass canyons suffocating now.

[Ruth]

The moon, a reference to melancholy, this is brilliant hon! The light gone, the missing of the song......we can have all the beauty around us and well.....still not see/hear what we desire, beautiful! xx

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

a soft melody accompanies this pearl~

[Quinn Blackburn]

One of the hardest things for me as a child in L.A. was the suffocating constriction of miles of concrete, glass, steel, and asphalt. A curiously oppressive cage, it felt like wearing shoes and clothes two sizes to small, like you could never really catch your breath. Marvelous wordcrafting, Robin! I'm loving this collection :o)

[G. K. Bostic]

And your song continues with a sadder note....I love "...a sigh of a moon" I am always amazed how you can use so few words and evoke such strong feeling. I truly feel and appreciate your poetry.