Liquidity
A Chapter by
Robin
california koans
the sun rose
and caught its fall
a dewdrop slipping
into the glossy stream
its soft note unheard
its ripple soon erased
the grace of nature
liquid ~
© 2011 Robin
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"The sun rose/ and caught it's fall"-- strong contrasting images between "rose" and "fall". Dawn-- a moment of clarity or an enlightened moment. What speaks the loudest in the koan is that the "soft note" is "unheard" and the lasting ripples of the koan are that "the ripple" is "soon erased". The "grace of nature"-- what smoothes everything over in nature or makes it always work out is that it's "liquid". I also enjoyed the cylcic quality as well-- a very fluid poem. Liquidity indeed.
Posted 13 Years Ago
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Precious poem.
Posted 13 Years Ago
Precious poem.
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
I can see every moment. Peaceful, comforting.
Posted 13 Years Ago
I can see every moment. Peaceful, comforting.
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
wow I love how you described liquid. Totally Special and inviting. Nice job on this.
I wish you the best on your future writing. :)
Posted 13 Years Ago
wow I love how you described liquid. Totally Special and inviting. Nice job on this.
I wish you the best on your future writing. :)
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
Savoring this picture....in its perfection. It is to me a scene of complete peace.
Posted 13 Years Ago
Savoring this picture....in its perfection. It is to me a scene of complete peace.
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
Gorgeous mind painting =)
Posted 13 Years Ago
Gorgeous mind painting =)
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
the eternity of a falling drop...perfection...
Posted 13 Years Ago
the eternity of a falling drop...perfection...
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A plop that sends ripples somewhere and is critical to the whole. Very lovely.
Posted 13 Years Ago
A plop that sends ripples somewhere and is critical to the whole. Very lovely.
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
Innocence lost, it kind of seems like something so pure getting lost in the flow. I love the image this graces my mind with...
Pure Beauty!
RLG,
Tommy
Posted 13 Years Ago
Innocence lost, it kind of seems like something so pure getting lost in the flow. I love the image this graces my mind with...
Pure Beauty!
RLG,
Tommy
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
To capture a single moment in time and frame the elegance of such beauty given from nature. To be enjoyed when desired.
Posted 13 Years Ago
To capture a single moment in time and frame the elegance of such beauty given from nature. To be enjoyed when desired.
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
food for the ethereal soul~ a trellis of beauty built from a beautiful mind~
Posted 13 Years Ago
food for the ethereal soul~ a trellis of beauty built from a beautiful mind~
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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I am a man , I breathe nature , I listen to the stars , I speak dream , music is my life blood , my words pour from my heart . I observe , my hands express .
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