Awesome. You know, this caused so many images to flash through my mind. I started thinking about hurricanes...then oddly enough, the little mermaid (kill me, please!). Then, manatees and pirates who thought they were mermaids, and how close they've gotten to extinction...
It ain't pretty, but the flow, and the words, are. Nice work.
The first verse reminds me of a flash flood in the sandstone deserts, where often hikers are trapped and die in the waters. As I read on, I see the image of a dormant tractor, as if it make wake again, but yet it rusts...and then you lead me on to a near mythical flood, as the waters continue to rise and the "night worries" and the "sunrise breaks promises"...have the waters come to cleanse the earth with destruction? Amazing.
I absolutely love this: "isolated inverted islands"
If it were any other letter in the beginning, it may not have been as great, but the repetition of the "i" really adds power to the poem.
The last stanza is brilliant.
This does create a very desolate picture of desperation and hopelessness, scenes like this exist way too much in our world. You did a wonderful job on capturing this, it ain't pretty is just how life is sometimes. We just need the pretty moments too so we can cope and survive the not so pretty ones.
I am a man , I breathe nature , I listen to the stars , I speak dream , music is my life blood , my words pour from my heart . I observe , my hands express .
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