Fat Man

object at rest ...

 

 

Fat Man with remote

sits comfy in his hollow

couch sighs not again

 

Author's Note

Senryu , a form similiar to Haiku , a satirical look at human nature

Reviews

[Narnie]

I was married to a man who spent ages looking for batteries for the remote whilst bemoaning the fact he was missing his programme. I didn't bother to wonder why he didn't just get up and turn it over by the button. I just carried on watching whatever I was watching. :) In our house we call the remote the 'wand.' This should have a pic of Homer with it, Robin. My review is officially longer than your poem. Hehe, I am USELESS at reviewing haikus and senryus.

[.]

half the population! Nicely put

[Sunflower/Sara Kendrick]

I wonder what made that man sigh...He seemed to have it all...Food, entertainment,control of the remote....Sara

[Emily]

Wonderful short piece. Absolutely intense in so few words.

Well done.

[PianoandPage]

wow! i am amazed at your expert use of double meaning here.

love how he is comfy in his hollow
and that it is the couch who sighs "not again"

genius!

this slice of american life. the picture is immediately familiar and vivid.

i think haiku and senyru gets a bad wrap but when done well they truly elevate poetry. thank you for this excellent gem!

[Ruth]

A ggod Haiku love!
To not sigh again, hmm, thats interesting,a lesson to get off the couch! lol
xx

[Marie Harrison]

Ha! this is too funny!

[kuru]

lol that made me smile..nicely worded

[Desert Dreamer]

Such a sad view of human nature...good job, I see the image of Fat Man.

[Charles]

Excellent form for a man of precision. Good write.

[Miss Coral]

Very nicely done senyru- I've always been terrible at those. The capitalization of the name really adds a lot to this. Wonderfully penned.
Great write.

-Coral-