It's always a pleasure to read you, Robin, and this was no exception. I love the candid takes on all the characters, and how you managed to flip the whole Oz story on its head.
I am reminded of one of my favorite internet memes for some reason: If you watch Jaws backwards, it's about a shark who throws up people until eventually they have to open a beach.
I would not have understood this at all if it weren't for my love of that story. Excellent piece.. I love the phrasing and the different look on those things. Wonderfully done.
Oh, how I loved "The Wizard of Oz" as a child, and a fantastic description in poetic form of her journey........ my sister and I use to be terrified of the witch, but Toto was so sweet..........love it!
hooked nose hag
her eyes wide, reaching
greed was her fire
doused by an innocent act
"storms came
sooner than she needed,
the midwest does that
sucked up in dreams
of a bejeweled city,
nestled between dreamland and hell" I like this line I was actually trying to guess the city...Nevada good job.
stranger became hero
rising above the little people
her allegiance to
thoughtless, heartless cowards
I loved this stanza right here... Favorite part - at first, before I noticed, I was wondering what you meant by "thoughtless, heartless cowards"...then it hit me, and I very nearly fell to my face (don't worry, I'm sitting on the floor right about now, so it wouldn't have been too far a fall). You know, I didn't like the wizard of oz (or that unfortunate Michael Jackson spin on the tale, The Wiz - I'm a hater), but this right here made me want to go out and get me a copy of it...though, I much don't feel like the drive to walmart at 2.00 in the morning (Walmart's sort of like Oz, I think).
Well written and a fun read, to say the least. I think Selene definitely got the right of it.
. ah! ... enchanting all the way ... and exceedingly poetic ... starts with a drizzle and ends with home ... your writing has a unique aroma ... and when i read something like this ... i so wish that mainstream, hot off the press, cutting edge poetry ... makes it to mainstream education ... the timelessness of classics ... and the timelessness of brilliantly rendered odes ... is so captivating ...
what a wonderful adventure of words, reigniting our childhood push off, that should have taught us for all time about wizards, and helped us avoid the truth that wherever we are is home...a right decent homage, i would say
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