Touch

Touch

A Poem by Robin
"

sudden reminiscence

"
and there you were 

a daydream in your delicate palm 

I watched your eyes race the sky

and heard your sigh

as you fell to your knees

to the mirror of dark waters  

beckoning a rainbow from sullen clouds


my Time machine

of crickets and songbirds 

the summer wind , and a million stars 

a music box  

as the universe spun around us 

brilliant and huge 

this unknowing , this adventure we called love 

between goddess and prince 

a violin and bow 

stillness
 
permeating silence

such are the secrets 

of touch , and the sky 

and the mandala 

of her eyes ...  






copyright 2012 Robin Amaral all rights reserved 

© 2012 Robin


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A wonderful exploration of love, relationships, nature and the harmony between them all. I've always struggled when writing about these sorts of things and I admire how you've done it, the delicate yet vivid images...A true joy to read :) thank you and well done..

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Robin

11 Years Ago

Such key words - nature, and harmony . Thank you for reading Bertie



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Your prose is so delicate, yet it packs quite an emotional punch...this was a truly beautiful piece on remembrance, perhaps of love lost? Extraordinary. Thank you for sharing this with us.

-kimmer

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Robin

11 Years Ago

Thank you Kimmer
Wow, this is silk on the tongue. I'd take out the ellipses at the end and also in the second line, I'd change "your" to "a" or "the" I'm glad Steven recommended this to me.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Robin

11 Years Ago

Mmmm , Silk is one of those words that pours across my spectrum of synesthesia . Ellipsis and your .. read more
Your ink has brought this to life, but only a knowing heart could recognize all this beauty as such. Love, love, ' mandala of her eyes', is there a more perfect phrase? Lovely.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Wow. I loved this. A seeing deeper into the moment. Wonder if it gets even a touch better by deleting "spun around us." Like using "as" to create a simile between music box and universe. Anyway, great write.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Steven

11 Years Ago

btw, just listened to Babel--f*****g great! Of course, a French woman reciting it doesn't hurt.
Robin

11 Years Ago

Thanks , actually she is Romanian , and a favorite poet . She is in my top ten of my friend list - L.. read more
Steven

11 Years Ago

Good good
'A sudden reminiscence', a precious and unexpected moment that stayed long enough to create a tribute to a deep and very special love. You belong out there, where life is more or less what it seems.. but isn't. Beautiful.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Robin

11 Years Ago

Thank you Emma
A beautiful piece, one of those that makes a spirit like mine ruminate on the natural beauty around us (be it human or weather-related). You connect the rational to the natural with the simple mention of mandala. This denotes how symmetry can be found in the smallest of corners. Thank you for this, Robin.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Robin

11 Years Ago

Thank you for this insightful comment Kenneth , and the connection
This is marvelous Robin, I didn't expected anything else from a true seeer, and feeler of the universe. Neutral, perceiving, reflecting, gentle, and wise. A song to the heart, of those who need it. Always, a pleasure to be around you.

E.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Robin

11 Years Ago

Happy you feel the music E. Thank you

11 Years Ago

♫☺♪ Always...... you know that :) YW
Your poems breathe Robin, no other way to describe it. They have a life of their own, complete with breath, pulse and mostly, a living heart.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Robin

11 Years Ago

You have brought me a huge smile this day Lorena , Thank you ~
LA Lorena

11 Years Ago

I'm glad!
Robin

11 Years Ago

I pour my Ink , through heart and soul , breath by breath , heartbeat by heartbeat . it is nice to h.. read more
This was exquisite, and if I could so elegantly describe that moment when I starting believing in fairy tales this is how it would be written, a perfect expression that plays on soul strings.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Robin

11 Years Ago

such is the magik , thank you
Stunning imagery involved here. A chance to recollect the dawn in all its beauty, the shards, complete for the moment. Just beautiful :) xox

Posted 11 Years Ago


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Robin

11 Years Ago

Many thanks for sharing your thoughts Poppy
Ruth

11 Years Ago

Always :)

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