Touch

sudden reminiscence

and there you were 

a daydream in your delicate palm 

I watched your eyes race the sky

and heard your sigh

as you fell to your knees

to the mirror of dark waters  

beckoning a rainbow from sullen clouds


my Time machine

of crickets and songbirds 

the summer wind , and a million stars 

a music box  

as the universe spun around us 

brilliant and huge 

this unknowing , this adventure we called love 

between goddess and prince 

a violin and bow 

stillness
 
permeating silence

such are the secrets 

of touch , and the sky 

and the mandala 

of her eyes ...  






copyright 2012 Robin Amaral all rights reserved 

Reviews

[Bertie]

A wonderful exploration of love, relationships, nature and the harmony between them all. I've always struggled when writing about these sorts of things and I admire how you've done it, the delicate yet vivid images...A true joy to read :) thank you and well done..

[Robin]

Such key words - nature, and harmony . Thank you for reading Bertie

[Crystal Elisa]

I can tell why, Steven recommended I read this one. we have very similar styles in terms of rhythm and sound. I love this piece. my one criticism would be that it almost seems too delicate to be so packed with images. Maybe a stronger transition from the present moment of sad reflection in the first 7 lines to the trying to reverse time and make things better of the rest of the poem. The structure doesn't seem to be holding up the sentiment, experiment with form a bit.

but I loved it.

[Mark]

We can't help ourselves sometimes. Leaping from this cliff, shouting to that mountain, giving without knowing we will be given. Lovely write.

[The_Jabberwock]

"and the mandala of her eyes..."

[EmpressPoetess]

Wow! Breathtaking! Your descriptive words are enchanting. you created some great visuals with your metaphors that paint a haunting picture. Grand writing!

[James William Dyer]

I love how you mixed nature love and the magic of science. Nice imagery too

[SkinlessFrank]

i would walk into an emerald cave and maybe feel these things

[writing mojo]

I love how the normal in these elementary things make inspiration live through your words pressed so delicately in place of the soul onto the page...amazing piece

[Michael Kevin Spencer]

surreal and crisp, this evoked a lot of subjective depth to me.

[Robin]

Appreciate those willing to reach those depths, thank you

[jacob erin-cilberto]

we go to together like a violin and a bow...and make beautiful music together.


this has such startling imagery..it leads the reader to think, simple is coming..and then showers us with such wonderful turns of phrase..

nicely done.

jacob

[Robin]

Thank you Jacob for your appreciation .