Touch

Touch

A Poem by Robin
"

sudden reminiscence

"
and there you were 

a daydream in your delicate palm 

I watched your eyes race the sky

and heard your sigh

as you fell to your knees

to the mirror of dark waters  

beckoning a rainbow from sullen clouds


my Time machine

of crickets and songbirds 

the summer wind , and a million stars 

a music box  

as the universe spun around us 

brilliant and huge 

this unknowing , this adventure we called love 

between goddess and prince 

a violin and bow 

stillness
 
permeating silence

such are the secrets 

of touch , and the sky 

and the mandala 

of her eyes ...  






copyright 2012 Robin Amaral all rights reserved 

© 2012 Robin


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A wonderful exploration of love, relationships, nature and the harmony between them all. I've always struggled when writing about these sorts of things and I admire how you've done it, the delicate yet vivid images...A true joy to read :) thank you and well done..

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Robin

11 Years Ago

Such key words - nature, and harmony . Thank you for reading Bertie



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I can tell why, Steven recommended I read this one. we have very similar styles in terms of rhythm and sound. I love this piece. my one criticism would be that it almost seems too delicate to be so packed with images. Maybe a stronger transition from the present moment of sad reflection in the first 7 lines to the trying to reverse time and make things better of the rest of the poem. The structure doesn't seem to be holding up the sentiment, experiment with form a bit.

but I loved it.

Posted 11 Years Ago


We can't help ourselves sometimes. Leaping from this cliff, shouting to that mountain, giving without knowing we will be given. Lovely write.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

"and the mandala of her eyes..."

Posted 11 Years Ago


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Wow! Breathtaking! Your descriptive words are enchanting. you created some great visuals with your metaphors that paint a haunting picture. Grand writing!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I love how you mixed nature love and the magic of science. Nice imagery too

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

i would walk into an emerald cave and maybe feel these things

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I love how the normal in these elementary things make inspiration live through your words pressed so delicately in place of the soul onto the page...amazing piece

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

surreal and crisp, this evoked a lot of subjective depth to me.

Posted 11 Years Ago


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Robin

11 Years Ago

Appreciate those willing to reach those depths, thank you
A wonderful exploration of love, relationships, nature and the harmony between them all. I've always struggled when writing about these sorts of things and I admire how you've done it, the delicate yet vivid images...A true joy to read :) thank you and well done..

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Robin

11 Years Ago

Such key words - nature, and harmony . Thank you for reading Bertie
we go to together like a violin and a bow...and make beautiful music together.


this has such startling imagery..it leads the reader to think, simple is coming..and then showers us with such wonderful turns of phrase..

nicely done.

jacob

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Robin

11 Years Ago

Thank you Jacob for your appreciation .

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