dictation

The weedy field is cracked and
dried out. The water flows a
little slow. The screen door hardly
keeps the flies out though

they’re dying and I think they know.
She’ll grow up to take dictation
her sister’ll marry
and have a child to show.
Mom is dead since last mid-winter
They dug a hole down through the snow
Lets take off and feel the twilight,
school begins in a week or so.
Then return to deal the cards out
and later pack the cars to go.
I don’t know a single secret.
Are you shepherding me to sleep again.
Every word another brick.
Every thought completes the wall.
I know you’ll tell me of a new love
before tomorrow afternoon.
Cook some soup this Sunday for us.
The rain and dark will keep us home.
I’ll imagine that I gave you bouquets.
Not the trivial life I’ve known.

Reviews

[Peter Rogerson]

Echoes of Pink Floyd... but no imitation. And the ending is so sad because it resonates in just about everyone, I would have thought.

[. serah .]

-- the sadness in the closing image is almost palpable... -- the scenes you paint are unique to your writing... "let's take off and feel the twilight" is my favourite one...