beginnings

The Darkness falls all around me....
I see a figure in the distance....
She walks towards me with caution but with confidence
at first im a little scared....but safe....
a little shy....but i feel comfortable.....
The Feelings overwhelm me...
Fear fleds from my body....
Troubles....
Worries....
Pains.....
and Stress....
Vanish into the Dark Abyss....
A new....but strange Feeling is welcomed into my body
it feels Warm and Tender....
Caring and Comfortable....
This feeling...
Love...
The way she holds me.....
The way she looks into my eyes....
The way she touches my heart....
The way she feels about me....
Love....
The Moonlight relfects off her eyes making them glow
Shooting Stars all around us.....
It feels so right
Romantic it is.....
i could stay lost in that memory forever

Reviews

[Brandon Meyers]

This captures that first moment very well. Nice one!

[chris' girlfriend]

thats beautiful!! so romantic

[Annalisa]

This was good, but the ellipses at the end of the lines was distracting and unnecessary. Because of the break in the line the reader naturally pauses, when you add the ellipses... it looks messy. But the base of the poem was nice.