Quietus

Today is my moms birthday. 1964-2013.

Today, as the clock strikes twelve, 

I am thrust through starlight and nebulas 

back to an era long since past, 

where freedom rang from the sky above 

and your voice was the very foundation beneath my feet, 

your long, slim fingers grasped my hands, 

lifting me from perdition into light, 

again I am swept away into memory, 

as once again you lifted me up, 

instead in this moment it was to cheers 

and tears fell down your cheeks in pride, 

violently I am ripped from peace, I remember, 

the consistent clicking of machines and staff scurrying by, 

anxious, waiting, pacing, 

then relief so brief filled my heart as yours continued on, 

but in finality, I stumble into the darkness, 

 your heartbeat beating on so slowly 

that I felt mine would stop if a moment of silence passed, 

and suddenly I am choking, I am pleading for air and life 

while reaching for those long, slim fingers that once lifted me up, 

I crash, and I am fallen.

by Brittany Zedalis in Dead Snakes Poetry 

Author's Note

http://deadsnakes.blogspot.com/2015/07/brittany-zedalis-two-poems.html

Reviews

[Nila M.]

I really love how you used the images of space and stars to evoke a sense that we have a very particular point in time in which we exist. At least that's how I felt reading it. As if it's difficult for souls that long for the eternal to exist through these temporary situations. I found this very well written and definitely expressing emotion.

[Brittany Zedalis]

Thank you so much! This is a hugely important poem to me. I wrote it on my mother's most recent birthday in memory of her.

[Nila M.]

Very well done, and very touching.

[Avinash]

This intimate tale of love gives a glimpse of ethos of the waves which splash those who are deeply in love.

[Brittany Zedalis]

Thank you, Avinash. That was a very poetic response.

[Ruth]

I am so sorry...beautiful dedication...memories give solace when needed, I understand that deeply...love to you hon xo

[Brittany Zedalis]

Thank you! I cherish the memories I have with her.

[Josie E. Cook M. A.]

Memories keep us going when we have to give up a cherished and close loved one.
Here you tell about those, and more inside the words.
Your ending is abrupt with the event echoing in time
with the emotions rushing throughout.
May peace be with you.

[Brittany Zedalis]

Much appreciated, Josie.

[Josie E. Cook M. A.]

:) I enjoy reading poetry daily as time allows.

[Pushkar Prabhat]

so sorry for your loss......
this is very heartfelt.....beautiful dedication.........
those are tough times.......wish you strength.......
our loved ones will always live in our memories......
beautiful poem.....
:)

[Brittany Zedalis]

Thank you, Pushkar. I've finally found I'm okay most days, but I definitely have those few where I miss her terribly.

[Pushkar Prabhat]

i can understand..........hopefully time will ease those painful days.......my prayers are with you........ :) :)

[Saddam]

Oh sad dear.
But a good poetry at the situation and expressed well.
Great read as write.

[Brittany Zedalis]

Thank you very much, Saddam.

[Alisa Js]

Aloha,

What a beautiful and loving tribute to the memory of your mother...

Alisa

[Brittany Zedalis]

Much appreciated, Alisa.

[MsJewel]

Your words are heartfelt my dear. I'm so sorry for your loss...
When my mother passed away, I remember the feeling of not being able to breathe...
Your poem has touched my heart.

Julie

[Brittany Zedalis]

Thank you, Julie. For months after losing mine, I had severe panic attacks and felt like I couldn't breathe. I had to leave class once or twice because of it.

[~]

Ohhh my dear,
sorry about your loss. even though we know that death will eventually part us with our loved ones, there is nothing in this world that can prepare us for any loved ones loss.

Powerful feelings my dear.
Hugs!! May you live to remember her loving spirit.

[Brittany Zedalis]

Thank you very much for your kind words.

[Lyn Anderson]

There are some losses whose sharpness barely leaves us with the passage of time. Beautifully expressed.

[Brittany Zedalis]

Very true, KL. Thank you for reading this one.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

very strong emotion in this piece...i can feel your loss...that feeling of crashing...lost my mom this past september...

even though i appreciated her while she was here...once she is gone...i wonder if i appreciated her enough.

this is so well written.

[Brittany Zedalis]

I'm very sorry for your loss, Jacob. It is a horrible thing to go through, and I too wonder if I appreciated my mom enough. I think it's something we deal with for a long time after their passing.

Thank you very much for reading.