The Travelers Tales of Loneliness

The Travelers Tales of Loneliness

Might not a lover in his wanning years,

With his idle hands and an absent stare,

Shuffling the pages of a writer's note,

Suprised, turn to look on empty air.

His thoughts once and all, his only worth,

But now forgotten on dusty shelves.

When his youth and love imbued the mind

and he rose anew in ancient tales.

Tears break forth that ever this should be.

Love is a vision that would soon rearise.

As if pain like light rose above the sea,

And his heart did leap with mad surprise.

When a kiss from love shines in the eyes.

He sees his own spirit look back at him.

Author's Note

Reviews

[CoraZanini]

Raymond beautiful job. "His thoughts once and all, his only worth,
But now forgotten on dusty shelves.
When his youth and love imbued the mind
and he rose anew in ancient tales." This line got me the most. It frightens me a little,a thought of being forgotten.Keep me informed,would like to read more of you!

[Raymond Federle]

Thank you so much for your review! :)

[Raymond Federle]

this has always been one of my favs

[Antoinette]

nicely done, as always!!!

[Brittany Zedalis]

Wow, this is really impressive work. (:

[icelandicblue]

We have the ability to live in moments past and hope that there might be some future moments waiting for us.

Tears break forth that ever this should be.
Love is a vision that would soon rearise.
As if pain like light rose above the sea,
And his heart did leap with mad surprise.


When a kiss from love shines in the eyes.
He sees his own spirit look back at him.

[Bluefire]

I like the idea and story here, it is quite lonely and sad but also it finds time to remember the adventures trapped within the travler's mind.
Well played. ^^

[Raymond Federle]

Enigmatic, elusive, otherworldly..... such a beautiful piece again, sigh, I'm hating my busy times, for not being more here, and read your art. :) but I know it's timeless, as are we, so in our own time, we'll read, feel and see... fantastic Ray. To travel to loneliness, it the most deep, and artful deep sea rock bottom, or riff to find... you just are not afraid, and aware. Brilliant, mature, and real.

- Elisa

[Raymond Federle]

Again, thank you so much! :)

You are very welcome dear Ray :)

[star73]

very sad thanks for sharing very amazing!

[Raymond Federle]

Thank you for your review!

[Cory Barrett]

This is like a deep breath, and a long tired sigh. Good write.

[Raymond Federle]

Thanks for reading! :)

[Rita L. Sev]

A well crafted "almost sonnet"; the flow works well here. The title reminded me of Chaucer. :)

[Raymond Federle]

When writing in this style I do confess I take notes from W. Shakespeare. thanks for reviewing! :)

[Baby Ricochet]

Wow this is really sad. I need some happy pills now. Good one sir!

[Raymond Federle]

Thank you for reviewing BR! :)