Rest Forever Young

(Requiem Aeternitatis Fetus)

Rest your head in my hands, it's okay.

Lacerated by strands, let life slip away;

Away into black, high up in the blue.

Take it all away, the pain that dwells inside you.

Make a wish, it will never come true, make do, make do.

As always, as well,

as in what you've been through,

it's all been hell, it's all so true.

Settle no more, settle the score.

What in the world are you waiting for?

Wrap your ends to a very tall tree.

Stand on a rock, then lift up your feet.

Leave behind the ground beneath,

the world below, the pain is brief.

Get ready, get set, go on and on.

Painless, well played, free from the cold.

Young and perfect, not growing old,

Let go of everything, but still you hold on.

You won't miss me, once I am gone.

Time will tell so come on, come on.

Say later to the day, I can't make it through the night.

I'd rather surrender, than struggle and fight

I declare there be peace to the air I breathe.

The last deep breath that runs through me.

You're on top of the world, I'll never be;

As good as you, poor me, poor me.

Author's Note

Reviews

[Leigh]

Your words are dark and disturbing and certainly reach out. There is a rich quality and subtleties to this. Great work Raymond.

[Bluefire]

Dark and peaceful, yet compelling.
I liked that it was in black and white save for the blue tint of the snow and sky.
Well done. ^^

[Raymond Federle]

Thanks for the review!!! :)

[Bluefire]

You're welcome! ^^

[Pryde Foltz]

Painless, well played, free from the cold.
Young and perfect, not growing old,
Let go of everything, but still you hold on.
You won't miss me, once I am gone.
Time will tell so come on, come on.

Poignant and spine-chilling.

[Raymond Federle]

Thanks for the review!!!! :)

[Brittany Zedalis]

A compelling piece. Simply remarkable. Great work as always! :]

[Lyn Anderson]

This poem is truly powerful in all respects, and excellent accompaniment to the music.

[Raymond Federle]

Thank so much KL !!! :)

[Raymond Federle]

Tweaked the verse a bit for better flow and re-mixed the song a bit.... ENJOY!

[MsJewel]

A melancholy little masterpiece Raymond - so many outstanding lines. Your talent never ceases to amaze me

:) Julie

[Raymond Federle]

Thank you Jules! :)

[stars are far]

That was a beautiful work.well done

[Vidya Bacchus]

Bittersweet musings of the days gone by .Awesome pen Ray :)

[Raymond Federle]

Thanks for the review Vidya!

[Vidya Bacchus]

You are welcome :)